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Choices in the Road (Free verse) by Pervy Elf
the fork in the road; dividing, seperating. Me from you. Which path to take? happiness, ever fleeting. She keeps you, from me: being happy: with you. two choices, one decision. Which will you take? Her? Me? Quickly: always walking: further: from you; happiness. soon I will be gone: from you.

Down the ladder: he is dead

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.4
Weighted score: 4.6900725
Overall Rank: 12069
Posted: February 25, 2004 10:08 PM PST; Last modified: February 25, 2004 10:08 PM PST
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[5] zodiac @ 67.240.211.159 | 26-Feb-04/5:38 AM | Reply
I'd like to recommend the following revision:

Choices in the Road (Free verse) by Pervy Elf

Two roads diverged in a yellow wood,
And sorry I could not travel both
And be one traveler long I stood
Scratching my cock (which has a hood)
In its tangle of pubic undergrowth.
[7] richa @ 81.178.212.40 | 26-Feb-04/7:49 AM | Reply
To express this sentiment should only take two sentences max.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 163.1.146.114 > richa | 26-Feb-04/12:06 PM | Reply
By that logic, ev'ry one of my poemes should be condensed into a single word: hope.
[5] zodiac @ 67.240.155.188 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 26-Feb-04/12:30 PM | Reply
nope.
[0] smlink84 @ 68.98.150.99 > zodiac | 26-Feb-04/8:37 PM | Reply
hope in dope maybe?
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