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Choices in the Road (Free verse) by Pervy Elf

the fork in the road; dividing, seperating. Me from you. Which path to take? happiness, ever fleeting. She keeps you, from me: being happy: with you. two choices, one decision. Which will you take? Her? Me? Quickly: always walking: further: from you; happiness. soon I will be gone: from you.

zodiac 26-Feb-04/5:38 AM
I'd like to recommend the following revision:

Choices in the Road (Free verse) by Pervy Elf

Two roads diverged in a yellow wood,
And sorry I could not travel both
And be one traveler long I stood
Scratching my cock (which has a hood)
In its tangle of pubic undergrowth.




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