on Bagni di Lucca by Sasha
6 Nov 2006, 9:46 AM
I'll trust you to have got the translation right. Is this a form of sonnet?
replying on Rare Oul' Times in the County Wicklow by Edna Sweetlove
4 Nov 2006, 8:43 AM
Edna only posts the racist remarks as bait - the way Dark Angel used to, but without the style, wit, humour and intellect. Hence why you guys are the barbarians and the Iraqis are all adorable, childlike rogues.
on For Elizabeth, Wherever She May Be by wilco
4 Nov 2006, 8:28 AM
Reads well, sounds better :-)
on The Hunter, the Hunted, and the Bystander by Dovina
3 Nov 2006, 9:51 AM
Nicely iambic for the most part. Is this from a film?
replying on The Hunter, the Hunted, and the Bystander by Dovina
3 Nov 2006, 9:50 AM
All Poetry is like this place, but with fewer genuine critiques and with more exclamation marks. I can't log in to Eratosphere at the moment though :(
replying on Rare Oul' Times in the County Wicklow by Edna Sweetlove
3 Nov 2006, 9:42 AM
Maybe 'eating cucumber sandwiches' would have been a more apt stereotype.
replying on Rare Oul' Times in the County Wicklow by Edna Sweetlove
3 Nov 2006, 9:41 AM
I doubt it. Why would anyone want to invade this country? Even Hitler didn't want it. The only way we'll be invaded is through mass immigration - which, okay, is happening now - but I don't think is quite what you mean. In any case, the only group who seems to have any interest in actually taking over this place is the Muslim sect - and Jack Straw knows what happens when you get a large number of Muslims in your constituency.
You never know, the BNP might one day throw up a leader with enough credibility to make it. That'll be interesting.
You never know, the BNP might one day throw up a leader with enough credibility to make it. That'll be interesting.
replying on The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy
1 Nov 2006, 2:25 AM
You see, I wouldn't mind that much even if you were anti-English, as I'm pretty sure that you would have some sort of thought behind it. As opposed to Edna who seems to have absorbed all the political nous that comes from using The Sun as toilet paper.
In any case, we're not exactly the most credible nation at the moment. And I don't see it changing in the near future :-(
In any case, we're not exactly the most credible nation at the moment. And I don't see it changing in the near future :-(
replying on The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy
1 Nov 2006, 2:20 AM
"It" is probably accurate enough.
replying on Rare Oul' Times in the County Wicklow by Edna Sweetlove
1 Nov 2006, 1:35 AM
That's some nice editing!
My grammar is lovely. When she was younger she could sing all twenty-three verses of 'Hooplah, Hooplah, Where's My Fucking Hooplah?' while making Sunday roast for an entire workhouse's population of orphans. Of course, in those days the rationing system didn't extend to orphans, miscreants, tramps or other undesirables so they had to roast an orphan every week. Occasionally they'd get lucky and a German pilot would come crashing down, screaming and burning in the wreckage. Those Germans are so full of chocolate and bratwurst they can feed an entire plantation's worth of GCSE-mentality controversial poets, can't they? With ketchup!!!!!!!11 LOL!!!!!!11111oneoneoneoneonehundredando
She never got her Hooplah.
My grammar is lovely. When she was younger she could sing all twenty-three verses of 'Hooplah, Hooplah, Where's My Fucking Hooplah?' while making Sunday roast for an entire workhouse's population of orphans. Of course, in those days the rationing system didn't extend to orphans, miscreants, tramps or other undesirables so they had to roast an orphan every week. Occasionally they'd get lucky and a German pilot would come crashing down, screaming and burning in the wreckage. Those Germans are so full of chocolate and bratwurst they can feed an entire plantation's worth of GCSE-mentality controversial poets, can't they? With ketchup!!!!!!!11 LOL!!!!!!11111oneoneoneoneonehundredando
She never got her Hooplah.
on Still by half.italian
31 Oct 2006, 6:40 AM
It's really scattered - more a collection of half-connected thoughts. I guess maybe that's what you're aiming at; if so they're a bit too independently crisp and sharp to be dreamy thoughts.
replying on The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy
31 Oct 2006, 6:36 AM
More predictable turd -0-
replying on Rare Oul' Times in the County Wicklow by Edna Sweetlove
30 Oct 2006, 2:33 AM
You are the only thing in the world that makes me wish I wasn't English. Anything to avoid being associated with you. "O 'Neill"? What the fuck? Where in the world is there a name like that? "O'X" means "of X". Would you ever say "Three O 'Clock"? What is a 'clock? Are you releasing all your pent-up testosterone that can't be unleashed under the stern eyes of those All Poetry moderators, or do you genuinely think you're hilarious? Either way, every comment you've ever made has now been reduced to utter buncombe. -bow'ls-
on Suburban Spleen by Sasha
30 Oct 2006, 2:19 AM
Excellent - I've missed your villanelles. Typo line 14 - 'unconscious'. Your refrains are extremely well-worked here and keep a constant flow, which isn't easy in a vil. I also quite like the occasional extra rhyme ('on', 'pawn'). It's almost contradictory though, the bleakness contained within such a beautiful form. It seems to demand a certain eloquence of language which undermines all the boredom represented.
'With the nuisance of a ray' is the best line here.
'With the nuisance of a ray' is the best line here.
replying on The Pit’s Bottom by Dovina
27 Oct 2006, 10:10 AM
Ha! Everlasting Godstopper, that's brilliant -10-
Jesus was a lesbian?
Jesus was a lesbian?
replying on The Pit’s Bottom by Dovina
27 Oct 2006, 4:35 AM
Well what can I say?
on Consider this by MacFrantic
27 Oct 2006, 4:33 AM
Now choose...the red pill - or the blue pill...
this: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
and this: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
it's an eight.