Re: # 2 by Lifeboatman	26-Oct-06/1:24 AM
This is good in places and not-so-good in others. 'Me, you and Solitude...' is good. 'There never was a king who us did rule; society had branded us fools' is not so good. Have a comb through the grammar, and reverse about 75% of the word order inversions. That's what I'd do, anyway.
Re: a comment on weather poem part 3: the hurricane (renga) by nypoet22	24-Oct-06/3:53 AM
Green eyes wait to open in cherry blossom's pale splendour
Re: The parameters of speech. by leon lyman	24-Oct-06/3:44 AM
Excellent. Might want a comma between letter and fencing in line 2.
Re: Golden Times by cpill	24-Oct-06/3:43 AM
It is an unbreakable and universal law of poetry that you must always rhyme 'pie-man' with 'Simon', if you are to rhyme 'pie-man' at all.
Re: Take that thing off your head by lukehanney	23-Oct-06/4:13 PM
I do believe that this is about Jade Goody's wedding day...
Re: a comment on Prologue by Dovina	23-Oct-06/4:11 PM
Ah, but the general public is mostly stupid. Then again, if the internet's anything to go by, so are most poets. You, fortunately, are not.
Re: a comment on MRS Degree by Miggy	23-Oct-06/4:08 PM
It's not the question you should be asking when writing; you should ask 'can I make people care?' I believe you have the ability. Unfortunately the above lyric fails.
Re: The Day Habeas Corpus Died by Wakeboarder20	23-Oct-06/8:37 AM
Neat idea
Re: Tennesee Waterfall by razorgrin	23-Oct-06/8:33 AM
I've heard it called a Kentucky Falls before; you guys must have some weird water features.
Re: a comment on MRS Degree by Miggy	23-Oct-06/8:28 AM
What Nick means isn't entirely that these are the worst lyrics of all time - I've seen worse - but that since the first post, 4 years ago, to this, the 99th post, there has been no shred of enthusiasm to actually improve upon mediocre poetry. That being said, this did at least inspire me to write a poeme of my very own: 'So She Won't Fuck You, Eh?' (hai-poo) by Ranger She's blonde She's thick She's had a lot of dick:- So what?
Re: Canada by PodPoet	21-Oct-06/5:40 PM
You're not from Canada, I see. Check out the Arrogant Worms' self-penned national anthem, 'Canada's Really Big'.
Re: Prologue by Dovina	21-Oct-06/5:23 PM
Excellent, D. I think this could be read as a monologue (referencing back to the title) wherein the poet is arguing with him/herself, or it could be an exchange between two. Do you know, if half the people on All Poetry took this view, the amount of poems online would be reduced by a massive percentage?
Re: A Beard Most Foul by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	20-Oct-06/10:56 AM
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Re: a comment on MRS Degree by Miggy	20-Oct-06/10:45 AM
That has to be the best comment all week. If ever suicide booths hit the big time, I want 'headbutting kitchen utensils' to be among the selection. After all, I cannot imagine how difficult it must be to attach a decent-sized knife well enough at head height with ordinary household adhesives.
Re: a comment on weather poem part 3: the hurricane (renga) by nypoet22	20-Oct-06/3:55 AM
Clay warriors rise; from a flooded tomb they march to the bluebells' chime
Re: a comment on Timing by Dovina	17-Oct-06/3:16 PM
Amen, unless of course anyone else has an interesting and enlightening view on the matter.
Re: Your Eyes by Dovina	17-Oct-06/3:07 PM
Nice
Re: a comment on Timing by Dovina	17-Oct-06/3:05 PM
I say the leap is too long because it's a gap of twenty feet and I broke my legs falling onto the ledge. But I do say that if we can fashion a crude parachute and a couple of splints it may just be possible to tumble not too fatally down to a more promising vantage point.
Re: a comment on Crappy by drnick	17-Oct-06/3:02 PM
My point exactly. If you're a programmer, you can change anything you like within a certain world. It just happens to be the computerised possible world.
Re: a comment on Work by half.italian	17-Oct-06/2:58 PM
The thing I'll say about the poem is that it reads like a paragraph of prose with semi-arbitrary line breaks.