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The parameters of speech.

by leon lyman

Member since 2006 · Posted 23 Oct 2006 · Edited 24 Oct 2006 · 3 comments

Within a sorted letter fencing spins a whirlwind from the lungs - bit into by two rows of teeth, suck stuck between two lips, a sheath for moisturised Berettas cocking cartridges on tongues. Drool that only ever drips, a sick dog off its muzzle, Each sentence is a clue and every paragraph a puzzle.

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[9] Ranger 24-Oct-06/3:44 AM Reply
Excellent. Might want a comma between letter and fencing in line 2.
[n/a] leon lyman › Ranger 24-Oct-06/4:33 AM Reply
Cheers. I was trying to figure out how to make the first stanza work.
[n/a] leon lyman › leon lyman 24-Oct-06/4:35 AM Reply
punctuation wise...