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The parameters of speech. (Free verse) by leon lyman

Within a sorted letter fencing spins a whirlwind from the lungs - bit into by two rows of teeth, suck stuck between two lips, a sheath for moisturised Berettas cocking cartridges on tongues. Drool that only ever drips, a sick dog off its muzzle, Each sentence is a clue and every paragraph a puzzle.

Ranger 24-Oct-06/3:44 AM
Excellent. Might want a comma between letter and fencing in line 2.




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