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Free verse № 147759

Consider this

Member since 2003 · Posted 27 Oct 2006 · 2 comments

You are not a product of your upbringing but rather, a prisoner. Every instinct is deformed by your ancestors. What has become of reason goes the ways of the seasons--repetitive and rediscovered. We mortals, in this age, are champions of everything but ourselves. In fears and regrets we dwell for years, lifetimes, until we break the bonds only to discover the free world is as certain as the chains we once bore. No one is original. There are those among us who, in a moment's time, have discovered more about you than you will ever know. That fated trance is what lures us to the beginning: an instant of complete innocence, reverence, and uncertainty. We shall never feel that again, but alas, we will pursue it with great intent. But what would you do with that righteousness, that impossibly honest experience? You would become what you already are, and not think twice about God or the Devil. We are fragments in a sea of ineffable words.

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[n/a] Ranger 27-Oct-06/4:33 AM Reply
Now choose...the red pill - or the blue pill...
[8] Dovina 27-Oct-06/2:26 PM Reply
Don’t “think twice about God or the Devil. We are fragments in a sea of ineffable words.”

I feel that way often. Sometimes I think it’s impossible to talk about God or the Devil without resorting to analogy or metaphor. Some say that if anthropomorphic language is all we have in these matters it becomes added evidence for their non-existence. I disagree but see their point.

Some good thoughts here, but could be more poetic, and at least called “prose poem.”