on February Loneliness by BenRice
18 Dec 2002, 2:13 AM
We've had A Hitchcock invasion of crows in the last few days, liked the last 7-8 lines -7-
on The City (New Jerusaem) by blkarak
16 Dec 2002, 9:38 AM
Xmas always breeds feelings of isolation, and decadent loneliness, i found this uplifting on a 2nd read and the last stanza is more spiritual than secular, however thoughts are always divided by thought provokers like this, my votes a 9
Not entirely memorable or original, try and explain the concept of suicide in a less trivial manner. You have to be, or had to be genuinely suicidal to write about suicide and hit people in a way they will think on what you have said. Dont be disheartened through malice in peoples criticism, answer them through your work and silent tongues will deafen you from what you created. Just gather inspiration, never force an emotion let it force you to write.
on Her Name was Lisa by Owner of the Sky
16 Dec 2002, 5:31 AM
This is poignant, It reminded me of me, once upon a time ago, this kind of experience is hard to write about with the style, substance and unpretentious way in which you sold it -my fave read today a golden egg has hatched you a 10
on The City (Sodom) by blkarak
16 Dec 2002, 5:26 AM
Wow, this rox
on fa11ing by Bill Z Bub
16 Dec 2002, 5:06 AM
I like this a lot
on Only you by Sugarbbybuttrfly
16 Dec 2002, 5:03 AM
Now, this is more simplistic and engaging than the others, it flows nicely and is undemanding in a good way, take a 7 sugar
on Damien by Sugarbbybuttrfly
16 Dec 2002, 5:01 AM
Not adult enough for me in its depiction of infatuation, you need to show more dimension to your work as this stands it makes the character look pitiful, and desperate.
You write the way you want too though I'm a miserable shit. (not voted)
You write the way you want too though I'm a miserable shit. (not voted)
on Myself by Sugarbbybuttrfly
16 Dec 2002, 4:57 AM
Needs more i think
on Am I Still Here? by Ranger
16 Dec 2002, 4:56 AM
This is a seminal work from you, And i my friend have something secret I have learned from this -congrats. ( I think the last 3 lines deserve more impact) I will think of it, scrambled thoughts at the moment =9=
PS i might write something happy
PS i might write something happy
on Bilboards, and music, just shouldn't be mixed. by Bachus
13 Dec 2002, 6:26 AM
Simon Cowell would die in his trousers over this
on Transformers "a higher, vaster, deeper meaning". by Bachus
13 Dec 2002, 6:24 AM
Transformer Smurf ? just a disturbing idea
on On a chill morning by razorgrin
13 Dec 2002, 3:47 AM
Fantsastico !
on Prize gained life, Death in wages by GTK
13 Dec 2002, 2:52 AM
Affecting ! check line one though shouldn't bath be bathe?
on alienheart by Bill Z Bub
13 Dec 2002, 2:25 AM
Bought back bad memories of the 'probe violation' i suffered at the hands of Darth Invader, hes a dirty bastard.
on Mum why are grandmas arms so baggy? by ==Doylum
13 Dec 2002, 2:22 AM
ahhhh the most wicked of all haikus, this made me crack up to the point of snotting all over my face so thank you for making me feel so fucking attractive. -10- go granny
on Some asshole with a shit band. by Plasticgirlwithgun
13 Dec 2002, 2:20 AM
Deliciously evil and bitchy, shoot me in slow mo plasticgirl