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Mum why are grandmas arms so baggy? (Haiku) by ==Doylum With age comes wisdom
retirement and bingo
then wings to fly there
Up the ladder:
the abandoned sea
Down the ladder:
Despair
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Posted: December 12, 2002 4:28 PM PST; Last modified: December 12, 2002 4:28 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.2934113 Overall Rank: 884 Comments:
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Bachus @ 24.126.113.154
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12-Dec-02/6:20 PM
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HOW DARE YE BESMIRCH THE MIGRATING ELDERLY! is there; heaven, bingo, and the four corners trip? i just bet.
Fly where?
I can see flying to bingo, but wisdom and retirement. That is stretching it. But then maybe you mean to the midlands or to the place where kitty went.
ahhhh the most wicked of all haikus, this made me crack up to the point of snotting all over my face so thank you for making me feel so fucking attractive. -10- go granny
i've seen it. but you get no lift from those elderwaffes. must be methane powered.
very funny, speedy d.
good one.9
meow. 0.
you don't like?
Doesn't exploit the inherent qualities of haiku very well. Not concrete enough. They say/With age comes wisdom,/retirement,/bingo - /then wings to fly there. Why not break it up. No need for a rigid, meaningless structure that has nothing to do with the poem. Normally I'd let it go but it seems so pained.s
oh great. Thanks!. 0010010
Yeah that works much much better. Care for some afterschool ringsting?
LMAO! Cute, and I agree...way to many free flyin older peeps ;) Nice one
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