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Mum why are grandmas arms so baggy? (Haiku) by ==Doylum

With age comes wisdom retirement and bingo then wings to fly there

-=SeTTle=- 18-Dec-02/1:57 PM
Doesn't exploit the inherent qualities of haiku very well. Not concrete enough. They say/With age comes wisdom,/retirement,/bingo - /then wings to fly there. Why not break it up. No need for a rigid, meaningless structure that has nothing to do with the poem. Normally I'd let it go but it seems so pained.s




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