| Re: What I know of monsters by Bachus |
21-Nov-03/2:54 PM |
Cracking
Werewolving my tears
back at the moon. I race through thickening
changings and habits too sooned.
class !
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| Re: an early discovery (reworking) by richa |
23-Nov-03/5:43 AM |
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someone who deserves the top my friend 10
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24-Nov-03/3:11 AM |
S3 = Z ? , are you richa?
Hmm Commudus, can you imagine Nero? he would be in Stringfellows permanently.
Wrapped up wel and draped in class
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| Re: Murder means oil for Bush's coffer by DreamerSupreme |
24-Nov-03/3:13 AM |
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More of a rant than a poem, however I can rant and this for the most part flows like still nudes to the eye. 7
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| Re: Mecca was mud in my backyard by Y2kSlamPoet |
24-Nov-03/3:18 AM |
I have to say it's been agres since i last read you and in that time you have evolved in to a good writer with a modern style to drag poetry in to the year of your user name. S2-4 are exquisite. Here's a midas number :-) Happy to see poemranker making reasons for nentwined to be happy that he's creating good poems.
Group hugs everyone
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24-Nov-03/3:23 AM |
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This poem is like a soft porn movie. I want to see these writing talents you have and the love. I want to read your poetic translations of love but where are they? Give me it all I've paid in full and not sneaked in round the back
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| Re: Ode to my Poopy by Samantha |
24-Nov-03/3:24 AM |
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Dark Angel will sue over this
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| Re: Teenage Guidance by Shit-Crumpets |
24-Nov-03/3:25 AM |
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24-Nov-03/3:29 AM |
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Love the subtlety and comparisons in S2. Line 2 seems to need something as to me it stuttered which served as a weaker link to very strong links. (Just chokes the flow in L2). Your a master at themes and nature and this is a fine addition to your work. 8
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| Re: Pinches by peaceseeker |
24-Nov-03/3:31 AM |
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Some interesting lines but it's FUBAR in many places, seperate in to stanzas the changes of direction and that will not terrorize the eyes so much. - no vote yet
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| Re: Breeding ground. by INTRANSIT |
24-Nov-03/7:36 AM |
Patina - cool word like it
Thes people are fused by self = typo in line
Found this absorbin i/t ! I know i'm looking in to this too deep but the line - high class in to deep atlantic made me think.
High class people are deemed to be shallow, cold water is deep, can you find the antonym?
Other than that it was all hits in the right places and it's a very layered poem - 8 = B+ = :0)
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| Re: Sweetart by Bachus |
24-Nov-03/7:40 AM |
Very good horus,
you did not bore us
T'was a fine old chorus
ye had here for us.
Sorry I'm high on furniture polish - must get back to work soon man.
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| Re: Wanting by Samantha |
24-Nov-03/7:41 AM |
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respect for trying a sonnet, i like your mojo austin 7
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| Re: Achilles, Mothers, and the Gods of war by Shardik |
26-Nov-03/3:50 PM |
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Haiku? Who cares it shines like snow man ....10 and a personal favourite of mine.
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| Re: The Boxer by DreamerSupreme |
27-Nov-03/1:58 AM |
Liked the Picasso reference in S1 and the unrelenting mood of violence you have created, makes me want to kill the bastard.
Good stuff
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| Re: An Angel from Venice Disappears by DreamerSupreme |
27-Nov-03/2:00 AM |
I've been checking your vote archives and from what i see, someone is zeroing you out of petty revenge.
At least I know your better than that.
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| Re: Supercharged by Nicholas Jones |
27-Nov-03/3:10 AM |
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27-Nov-03/3:12 AM |
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| Re: Don't fuck with Mr. Haiku by SupremeDreamer |
27-Nov-03/3:13 AM |
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says what a haiku does , a haiku about a haiku - novel idea 7
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27-Nov-03/3:14 AM |
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Some nice imagery but overlong 6
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