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Achilles, Mothers, and the Gods of war (Free verse) by Shardik
Look me in my eyes when you tell me you love me. Gods, and Mothers lie. Baptised in the Styx, love will hang you by your heels in Greek tragedies.

Up the ladder: One voice
Down the ladder: Spunkorpumpernipple

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.714286
Weighted score: 5.4610424
Overall Rank: 2887
Posted: November 26, 2003 12:46 PM PST; Last modified: November 26, 2003 12:46 PM PST
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[10] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.170.78 | 26-Nov-03/1:07 PM | Reply
I feel so inadequate now to speak of Mr. Haiku.
He wants me to say that he smiles on you
and your little haiku children.

Blessed with 10.
[n/a] Shardik @ 24.126.116.54 > DreamerSupreme | 26-Nov-03/1:11 PM | Reply
Awe shucks, I bet you say that to all of the sailors.
[10] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.170.78 > Shardik | 26-Nov-03/1:18 PM | Reply
Only the ones that follow the art of haiku- I myself have only just been saved, and given a new name signaling my death- and the birth of the shit crumpet, which allowed my rebirth to occur.
[n/a] Shit-Crumpets @ 204.31.170.78 > DreamerSupreme | 26-Nov-03/1:23 PM | Reply
you hapless little minion... come now and brush your teeth- you can use my old toothbrush, I've bought a new one.

Be thankful that I even allow you to clean your teeth, and don't dare beg for mouthwash.
[10] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.170.78 > Shit-Crumpets | 26-Nov-03/1:26 PM | Reply
Yes sir.. do forgive my impudence- I am unworthy.
[n/a] Shardik @ 24.126.116.54 > DreamerSupreme | 26-Nov-03/1:41 PM | Reply
Sleep will often keep one from chiding themselves.
[10] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.170.78 > Shardik | 26-Nov-03/1:49 PM | Reply
Oh goddamn it, thats below the belt you bastage.

Let me inform that I've slept a full 6 hours this morning before the folks next door starting pounding hammers at 10 am.
[n/a] Shardik @ 24.126.116.54 > DreamerSupreme | 26-Nov-03/3:19 PM | Reply
What, 6 hours in one week?
[10] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.180.252 > Shardik | 26-Nov-03/3:43 PM | Reply
Three days actually. Whats with you and using the old methhead comebacks? I was only performing my jester act damn you. Are you trying to push the Welbutrin & Prozac with free samples of Xanax & Valium?
[10] Caducus @ 195.92.168.166 | 26-Nov-03/3:50 PM | Reply
Haiku? Who cares it shines like snow man ....10 and a personal favourite of mine.
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