poemranker ::Achilles, Mothers, and the Gods of war by Shardik

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Achilles, Mothers, and the Gods of war

by Shardik

Member since 2003 · Posted 26 Nov 2003 · 10 comments

Look me in my eyes when you tell me you love me. Gods, and Mothers lie. Baptised in the Styx, love will hang you by your heels in Greek tragedies.

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[10] DreamerSupreme 26-Nov-03/1:07 PM Reply
I feel so inadequate now to speak of Mr. Haiku.
He wants me to say that he smiles on you
and your little haiku children.

Blessed with 10.
[n/a] Shardik › DreamerSupreme 26-Nov-03/1:11 PM Reply
Awe shucks, I bet you say that to all of the sailors.
[10] DreamerSupreme › Shardik 26-Nov-03/1:18 PM Reply
Only the ones that follow the art of haiku- I myself have only just been saved, and given a new name signaling my death- and the birth of the shit crumpet, which allowed my rebirth to occur.
[n/a] Shit-Crumpets › DreamerSupreme 26-Nov-03/1:23 PM Reply
you hapless little minion... come now and brush your teeth- you can use my old toothbrush, I've bought a new one.

Be thankful that I even allow you to clean your teeth, and don't dare beg for mouthwash.
[10] DreamerSupreme › Shit-Crumpets 26-Nov-03/1:26 PM Reply
Yes sir.. do forgive my impudence- I am unworthy.
[n/a] Shardik › DreamerSupreme 26-Nov-03/1:41 PM Reply
Sleep will often keep one from chiding themselves.
[10] DreamerSupreme › Shardik 26-Nov-03/1:49 PM Reply
Oh goddamn it, thats below the belt you bastage.

Let me inform that I've slept a full 6 hours this morning before the folks next door starting pounding hammers at 10 am.
[n/a] Shardik › DreamerSupreme 26-Nov-03/3:19 PM Reply
What, 6 hours in one week?
[10] DreamerSupreme › Shardik 26-Nov-03/3:43 PM Reply
Three days actually. Whats with you and using the old methhead comebacks? I was only performing my jester act damn you. Are you trying to push the Welbutrin & Prozac with free samples of Xanax & Valium?
[10] Caducus 26-Nov-03/3:50 PM Reply
Haiku? Who cares it shines like snow man ....10 and a personal favourite of mine.