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Breeding ground. (Free verse) by INTRANSIT
My lips blast bullet words
as I pass through this city
where bumpers are as good as
the middle finger. This city
that breeds homeless directly
into the gutters, and bears the
high class into cold atlantic
educations that cramp the mind.
La Guardia and j.f.k. are nothing
more than pimps for other coun-
tries.
These people are fused by self
serving subway ideals and sharing
is dumpster row. Central park
is a tool for relieving dogs. And
liberty inviting the huddled
masses stands only to collect patina.
These people would waste no time
elbowing John Donne into the hudson.
I can't believe they call themselves
critics. I will never bow to this city.
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.3333335
Weighted score: 5.62753
Overall Rank: 2208
Posted: November 13, 2003 1:40 PM PST; Last modified: November 24, 2003 8:14 AM PST
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Thes people are fused by self = typo in line
Found this absorbin i/t ! I know i'm looking in to this too deep but the line - high class in to deep atlantic made me think.
High class people are deemed to be shallow, cold water is deep, can you find the antonym?
Other than that it was all hits in the right places and it's a very layered poem - 8 = B+ = :0)
thanks for the flowers. anything else I might have done better?