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16-Jun-05/7:20 PM |
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My vote is that you meant shrubs (plants) not scrubs (Surgical garb). Perhaps, I just don't get it. Is this another Neverland ranch poem? -9-
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| Re: Students by Blue Magpie |
16-Jun-05/7:37 PM |
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I hear children's voices reading lines 12 through 14. I would hope that there are teachers in this country who might listen to their students as well as you seem to listen to yours. I admit that lines 7 through 11 are a bit off putting in that the images have already been overused in the daily media. But all in all, it seems to be an honest effort.
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| Re: White Stork by Blue Magpie |
19-Jun-05/10:30 AM |
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| Re: The And women by INTRANSIT |
19-Jun-05/10:37 AM |
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Yeah, you're right. Those pumpkin shells don't keep them very well.
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| Re: word splatter by nentwined |
19-Jun-05/10:43 AM |
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So many nights just like the one described make me resonate with this poem. Now I have to shower with my flat screen monitor. A bit of William Carlos Williams or Carlos William Carlos in this one.
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| Re: Kiss Me by smiffy84 |
19-Jun-05/10:47 AM |
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fire, blisters, kiss me, take me away with your gothic foreplay... but not this lifetime; not today.-3- for length.
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| Re: A limerick by smiffy84 |
19-Jun-05/10:52 AM |
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When I heard this (let's see. I was twelve), It ended with the word "brother." Incest is always best in limerick form.
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| Re: Drowsy by elderking |
1-Jul-05/5:42 PM |
Those waltz days,
Those do-not-run days,
that lounge... Yeah! Great mood-ivation.
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| Re: The Worst Poem Ever Created (edited) by drnick |
28-Jul-05/7:11 PM |
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If the poem had ended at the word orgasm it would be a ten. The :) and comment suck the joyous insanity out of this poem.-6- for getting it half right.
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| Re: What?! by drnick |
28-Jul-05/7:13 PM |
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| Re: Suicide by jessicazee |
28-Jul-05/7:17 PM |
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Girl, you got poem bearing lips.
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| Re: a love not meant to be by nentwined |
28-Jul-05/7:22 PM |
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We all have a crack in our base but we keep on trying. As another poet on this site said earlier, "Why have the choice if we never choose?" Keep sticking your hand into the clay, Netwined. You'll get there someday.
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| Re: Showtime by INTRANSIT |
28-Jul-05/7:24 PM |
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Was this at a garden after dinner? I was busy getting twenty pieces of silver from my NEW powerful friends at the time.
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11-Sep-05/11:33 AM |
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This is so depressing... I love it.
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| Re: The Ship by Tainted Butterfly |
11-Sep-05/11:41 AM |
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Lose the fourth stanza and it would rock. By the third everyone reading this know it's about you. You pull it off at the end by making it about Everywoman/child. -7- for now.
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4-Oct-05/9:25 AM |
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I couldn't agree more. This site is a mini poetic autobiography. Right now life is not at its best. Maybe later life will start getting better. Maybe only the poems will. thanks for your input.
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6-Oct-05/10:08 PM |
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I wish I could edit without going to the top of the most recent list.
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| Re: Apocalypse has come to end by Prince of Void |
25-Dec-05/1:39 PM |
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"Screams of mans in end of their times" says it all.
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| Re: Broken Bird by Sisterwolf |
25-Dec-05/1:42 PM |
"He taught she is ugly, unworthy, dumb.
Now her feelings of worth are numb." sad
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| Re: Never Let Go Again by TLRufener |
25-Dec-05/1:46 PM |
"When I see you next
I will take you into my arms
And never let go again" kidnap?
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