| Re: Dance With Me by marvelis |
11-Apr-03/4:58 PM |
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this is one nice romantic poem and by the way you don't need to concentrate much on the rhyming of the poem,many of good poems don't rhyme,modern poetry doens't stand on rhyming so just feel like fre to write don't limit yourself with a usuage of words. i give this 6,pretty good work
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| Re: Februarys mother by INTRANSIT |
11-Apr-03/4:33 PM |
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something about it touches me alhtough i can't really tell whut.
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| Re: Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig |
11-Apr-03/4:19 PM |
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i loved the way that you seem to ask her something(if i touch you,could i be enlightened) but matter of fact is you are more of asking your self,i liked the way you are trying to kill the ghost of you father who is trying to keep you away of the light you are searching for. "there is no shame in holding myself" this sounds like you are tring to convince yourself.i give it 10,awesome work.
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| Re: Family Portrait by Mr Pig |
11-Apr-03/4:07 PM |
"Mum would find company in loneliness"
"Everything looks perfect in a Silver frame"
"The King of bastard pawns ashamed of his crown"
i liked these most of all,each one made a vision itself.i give this 9
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| Re: The Blooding by Mr Pig |
11-Apr-03/3:57 PM |
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the last 3 stanzas are realy what makes this poem,and i liked using the (I remember) at the begining of a new line.i give it 7
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| Re: a comment on Sorry for all the things by Mutant_X |
11-Apr-03/3:44 PM |
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why do i always fail at understanding your twisted expretions?
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| Re: a comment on You are not me by Mutant_X |
11-Apr-03/3:40 PM |
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yeah,some of you people write so good, but knowing that you've been through this makes me feel better,thanks,and sure i will check yours.
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| Re: a comment on You are not me by Mutant_X |
11-Apr-03/3:37 PM |
more and more i discover that i really appreciate constructive critiscm so thank you,you are really helping me.
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| Re: Februarys mother by INTRANSIT |
12-Mar-03/7:25 AM |
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Hi,i would like to invite you to join my poetry group at Studencenter.org,if you are interested just tell me.
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| Re: Little Miss Muff by Spider-Man |
12-Mar-03/7:23 AM |
Spider Man,
is it the comic or the tv show!!!!
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| Re: a comment on Angel by Mutant_X |
15-Jan-03/2:10 PM |
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i can't belive there are still ppl like you!! besides i aint even christian,and by the way,poetry is alot more than ur stupid shallow words
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| Re: A Gift of Beauty... by loneshadow29 |
4-Nov-02/7:49 AM |
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| Re: ~*Broken Soul*~ by Katie |
4-Nov-02/7:42 AM |
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i wish i can write like u,!
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| Re: Thoughtless Deed by craiggiarc1971 |
4-Nov-02/7:28 AM |
i give it a 6,still need to improve i guess but it's a good work though
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| Re: My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus |
28-Oct-02/7:42 AM |
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the last stanza is way impressive
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| Re: other by ThreeFourSix |
28-Oct-02/7:27 AM |
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| Re: Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore |
28-Oct-02/7:15 AM |
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| Re: AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
28-Oct-02/5:01 AM |
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go and die,have some mercy on me for god sake
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| Re: The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
28-Oct-02/4:29 AM |
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well,i always thought it's awfull to diss others poetry but honestly i think poetry isn't ur thing,try something else
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| Re: To Kiss by Jody Conn |
19-Oct-02/5:18 AM |
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