| Re: All Alone by pinay_miss_azn |
30-Jun-05/10:40 PM |
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This one doesn't seem to hold your essence like the last two of yours I've read, something's missing.
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| Re: You and I by pinay_miss_azn |
30-Jun-05/10:38 PM |
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So few really look in the eyes, it's always something else.Yet blue eyes can be a harbour for a lost soul.
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| Re: After A Love is Lost by pinay_miss_azn |
30-Jun-05/10:34 PM |
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When I first started reading this I wanted to tell you that the pain will subside... Scars are just something to brag about in a way.
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| Re: a comment on Old Friends by sliver |
30-Jun-05/10:24 PM |
Thank you, that means alot to me.
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| Re: a comment on Horatio by april fool |
26-May-05/8:55 PM |
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Are you by chance referring to Horatio Hornblower?
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| Re: A backsliders struggle by nicole081083 |
26-May-05/8:51 PM |
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I really liked this, mostly because it sounds like something I would have written.I especially like the part about forgetting your song. superb..
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| Re: Lower than low by nicole081083 |
26-May-05/8:48 PM |
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I would say 'that heaven let me in' in the first stanza. See how it flows better that way? A few other spots that seem to bog down a bit. A positive message, but I think you need repentance, also, for that forgiveness.
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| Re: Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT |
26-May-05/8:45 PM |
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I think perhaps the coroner would be better suited to clean up this mess.
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| Re: The Instructor by Alizarin_Crimson |
2-May-05/9:31 PM |
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| Re: The Instructor by Alizarin_Crimson |
2-May-05/9:30 PM |
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Well, hello. Nice to meet you. I just finished losing myself into a very blue canvas,really. I have only two words for you. Damn... Wow.
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| Re: a comment on In the aspens by sliver |
1-May-05/9:25 PM |
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Actually, if you've ever watched the aspens turn, they are multi-colored. The poetry itself mocks mother nature, but it's all a matter of interpretation.
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| Re: Sins of convenience by sunset sky |
29-Apr-05/3:20 PM |
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Damn, such violent tendencies in a poet, whatever shall we do?
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| Re: Just a Poem by Damien |
29-Apr-05/3:17 PM |
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A well made point, even if it did sound a bit forced.
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| Re: Wherever the Wind Will Blow by nothingtoanyone |
29-Apr-05/3:14 PM |
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did you mean relinquish? also wherever is one word, and nature's. grammer and punctuation is important for a writer, yes?
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| Re: Returning by Dovina |
28-Apr-05/8:12 PM |
If only more of us would open the doors of our minds.
I enjoyed the first stanza very much.The rest wasn't bad, ...
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| Re: a comment on Untitled by http://mulberryfairy |
28-Apr-05/8:03 PM |
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Sometimes it's forced upon you.
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| Re: The Resilient Woman by Joe-joe |
28-Apr-05/8:02 PM |
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| Re: Hanging Gallows by Hadasl |
28-Apr-05/7:57 PM |
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What does Zodiac know? I like it.
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| Re: The promise by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
28-Apr-05/7:54 PM |
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The first stanza reminds me of my friend Skip, "Stay out of my mind, there's things in there i don't want you to know." Good visuals.
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| Re: FREAKIN by celticskatermatt1 |
28-Apr-05/7:52 PM |
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Only because you misspelled cello
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