on All Alone by pinay_miss_azn
30 Jun 2005, 10:40 PM
This one doesn't seem to hold your essence like the last two of yours I've read, something's missing.
on You and I by pinay_miss_azn
30 Jun 2005, 10:38 PM
So few really look in the eyes, it's always something else.Yet blue eyes can be a harbour for a lost soul.
on After A Love is Lost by pinay_miss_azn
30 Jun 2005, 10:34 PM
When I first started reading this I wanted to tell you that the pain will subside... Scars are just something to brag about in a way.
replying on Old Friends by sliver
30 Jun 2005, 10:24 PM
Thank you, that means alot to me.
replying on Horatio by april fool
26 May 2005, 8:55 PM
Are you by chance referring to Horatio Hornblower?
on A backsliders struggle by nicole081083
26 May 2005, 8:51 PM
I really liked this, mostly because it sounds like something I would have written.I especially like the part about forgetting your song. superb..
on Lower than low by nicole081083
26 May 2005, 8:48 PM
I would say 'that heaven let me in' in the first stanza. See how it flows better that way? A few other spots that seem to bog down a bit. A positive message, but I think you need repentance, also, for that forgiveness.
on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT
26 May 2005, 8:45 PM
I think perhaps the coroner would be better suited to clean up this mess.
on The Instructor by Alizarin_Crimson
2 May 2005, 9:31 PM
BTW, Did he convert her?
on The Instructor by Alizarin_Crimson
2 May 2005, 9:30 PM
Well, hello. Nice to meet you. I just finished losing myself into a very blue canvas,really. I have only two words for you. Damn... Wow.
replying on In the aspens by sliver
1 May 2005, 9:25 PM
Actually, if you've ever watched the aspens turn, they are multi-colored. The poetry itself mocks mother nature, but it's all a matter of interpretation.
on Sins of convenience by sunset sky
29 Apr 2005, 3:20 PM
Damn, such violent tendencies in a poet, whatever shall we do?
on Just a Poem by Damien
29 Apr 2005, 3:17 PM
A well made point, even if it did sound a bit forced.
on Wherever the Wind Will Blow by nothingtoanyone
29 Apr 2005, 3:14 PM
did you mean relinquish? also wherever is one word, and nature's. grammer and punctuation is important for a writer, yes?
replying on Untitled by http://mulberryfairy
28 Apr 2005, 8:03 PM
Sometimes it's forced upon you.
on The Resilient Woman by Joe-joe
28 Apr 2005, 8:02 PM
What is a ship? Alex
on Hanging Gallows by Hadasl
28 Apr 2005, 7:57 PM
What does Zodiac know? I like it.
on The promise by thepinkbunnyofdoom
28 Apr 2005, 7:54 PM
The first stanza reminds me of my friend Skip, "Stay out of my mind, there's things in there i don't want you to know." Good visuals.
on FREAKIN by celticskatermatt1
28 Apr 2005, 7:52 PM
Only because you misspelled cello