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A backsliders struggle (Free verse) by nicole081083
So I'm lying here wondering when everything went wrong When I stopped caring about what was right and forgot my song I guess that path was a little more narrow than I realized I fell away from it and none of my friends were surprised. I keep drifting further and further from what's right I don't know if I'll make it back, I can't seem to see the light I've been here before, I know what I need to do Problem is, at this point part of me doesn't want to Then there's the part of me that knows better, that was brought up right But that part of me keeps fading until it's almost out of sight Will I ever get back to where I need to be And finally fulfill God's purpose for me?

Up the ladder: homer simpson
Down the ladder: Bread and blackthorns

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5790
Posted: May 3, 2005 2:29 PM PDT; Last modified: May 13, 2005 10:43 AM PDT
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Comments:
[5] Dovina @ 69.175.32.185 | 13-May-05/11:53 AM | Reply
Too many words. It would be stronger with half as many.
[9] sliver @ 172.198.81.177 | 26-May-05/8:51 PM | Reply
I really liked this, mostly because it sounds like something I would have written.I especially like the part about forgetting your song. superb..
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