| Re: the meeting by richa |
30-Sep-03/8:28 PM |
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Something tells me this is just right. yes, yes. Somehow I get this and it works. Excellent.
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| Re: Timber! by Shardik |
29-Sep-03/6:12 PM |
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Here's a joke for you: knawk knawk....
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| Re: a comment on Trapped in a horseshoe by INTRANSIT |
29-Sep-03/4:03 PM |
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don't you mean a brief (lesson)? god. I'm AWFUL tonight.
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| Re: a comment on EGG by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
29-Sep-03/3:57 PM |
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bad egg-drop soup? i kill me.
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| Re: a comment on Trapped in a horseshoe by INTRANSIT |
29-Sep-03/3:54 PM |
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I was gonna describe an imaginary woman using liquors as coloration for what she was wearing, skin tone etc. I was two Zins to the wind and 4 rewrites later....
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| Re: War Grave by Caducus |
29-Sep-03/3:43 PM |
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How many years have we been on this planet? And we've still learned nothing. still doing the same ol' same ol'. What's taking Jesu so damned long? Held up in a fast food line no doubt. Maybe just... held up?
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| Re: EGG by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
29-Sep-03/3:37 PM |
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I think your caps should be in the middle of line three, giving it somewhat of an arc. Like a small girl grossed out and sqealing. funny funny funny.
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| Re: a comment on Ode to the Renesis by INTRANSIT |
26-Sep-03/1:37 PM |
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no prob. the best way to have friends... is to be one. i'm kosher. sometimes dill. mostly kosher.
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| Re: Life's Work by baughworm |
26-Sep-03/1:16 PM |
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cumbersome/heavy-redundant, in fact, lose the not started stanza altogether. and I don't like (poor sod) either. i get the geeling you're trying to end this on a positive note. poor sod doesn't fit. put it back on the lift, and adjust accordingly. whv.
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| Re: a comment on Ode to the Renesis by INTRANSIT |
26-Sep-03/1:06 PM |
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meh. thanks. with all the messes I have to fix, this will probably die.
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| Re: a comment on Pauling in Disguise (Ignorance and Arrogance) by Geschäftsreise |
25-Sep-03/5:56 PM |
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thank you. I try to be as personable as possible. i fall from time to time. i appreciate any poem that introduces me to something new. thanks again.
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| Re: a comment on Pauling in Disguise (Ignorance and Arrogance) by Geschäftsreise |
25-Sep-03/5:46 PM |
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| Re: Brighton Beach by Caducus |
25-Sep-03/5:38 PM |
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last line in s-1 took a wrong turn for me. otherwise....
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| Re: Pauling in Disguise (Ignorance and Arrogance) by Geschäftsreise |
25-Sep-03/5:20 PM |
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I won't spoil this for the others.
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| Re: body image by http://mulberryfairy |
25-Sep-03/5:00 PM |
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wordiness is an advantage. more to work with. unlike my sometimes ground-up-bones-for-a-poem style. Seriously, spend some time with this and the fox poem. both have plenty going for them. whv.
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| Re: a comment on One Moment to the Other (v3) by nentwined |
23-Sep-03/7:24 AM |
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yeah, i know. i'm still racking my brain to make (fighting erosion) better in the third stanza. grrrr.
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| Re: One Moment to the Other (v3) by nentwined |
23-Sep-03/7:19 AM |
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I'm not keen on emery for some reason. I suspect the stanza would need to be revised to correct and I know what a pain that can be. otherwise, this flows much better.
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| Re: a comment on Intersection poetry by INTRANSIT |
23-Sep-03/7:16 AM |
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as fast as i was going, i'm lucky i saw the damn thing. could I have a moment on : lunge fish, please. thank you. further eh? hmmm.
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| Re: this is your poetry by nentwined |
23-Sep-03/7:05 AM |
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If we followed this, would poemranker cease to exist?
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| Re: You are a divider by Bachus |
15-Sep-03/5:02 PM |
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Suggestion: DON'T Love with your all. Save some for yourself. It won't affect the intensity level at all. It's another dimension behind the levels. go.
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