Re: a comment on Some poems by INTRANSIT	6-Nov-07/8:21 PM
Listening is the key to poetry, no? Gotta get my ears tuned somehow. Thanks for the help !
Re: Behind closed offices by lukehanney	6-Nov-07/6:47 PM
perhaps I should k.i.s.s. my pomes too.
Re: Why I took my ears off by INTRANSIT	6-Nov-07/6:45 PM
wow. that bad huh?
Re: a comment on Flat by Skamper	6-Nov-07/5:36 AM
"A cardboard cutout of myself" Might make a better title.
Re: a comment on Some poems by INTRANSIT	5-Nov-07/5:26 AM
Gonna try those changes. Let's see.
Re: Flat by Skamper	4-Nov-07/5:38 AM
Part of me likes the incongruity. The other part doesn't, 'natch. Hmmm. I know cardboard burns hella fast, and burning gasoline and fire in the second-- The more I look at it the more I like it as is. Is the cardboard only there to describe you ?
Re: a comment on Dulacca - for a day by Skamper	4-Nov-07/5:27 AM
Oh! My sincerest apologies.
Re: a comment on Some poems by INTRANSIT	4-Nov-07/5:23 AM
Did you notice any hiccups in the rhythm ? That's what I'm most worried about at this point. Thanks.
Re: a comment on Winter Moon by Musicman	4-Nov-07/5:20 AM
Yes, cleaner.
Re: a comment on Dulacca - for a day by Skamper	3-Nov-07/8:07 AM
A "slab" of beer ? That IS cool. What's a twelver called? A sixer?
Re: Voice of the World by Dovina	2-Nov-07/6:01 AM
My gut says, this is a jump off point for what you really want to say. Sit on it.
Re: a comment on Dulacca - for a day by Skamper	2-Nov-07/5:59 AM
I'm guessing it's Austrailia. (sp?) He mentions a road train. Aussies run like 6 or more 53 footers with one tractor, Hence, r/t. I too, really like this. The kelly pool. Ha! Almost missed it.
Re: homer simpson by malpaso	2-Nov-07/5:54 AM
I see a lyric. The first two lines being the refrain. Add to it. Really.
Re: Nomad's Oasis by Caducus	27-Oct-07/3:52 PM
Play with the line breaks, would be my suggestion. From stanza two: drank from sweat and tears devoured refusal to stop searching for the promised land. no vote. yet.
Re: Dark Matter by Musicman	27-Oct-07/3:45 PM
Could you explain the term "movement" to me ? Using this piece as a for instance, if you like.
Re: Table for Two Please by Musicman	27-Oct-07/3:41 PM
Sorry. Even broken up, rest of the best, bugs me.
Re: a comment on Winter Moon by Musicman	27-Oct-07/3:39 PM
Almost forgot, for some reason I want > winter < at the end of the last. You're the one with the music though.
Re: a comment on Winter Moon by Musicman	27-Oct-07/3:37 PM
Steep? That's an understatement. 6 years plugging at this and still not and inch of progress. Or so it feels. How does it feel after 30?
Re: Bullfrog Night by Musicman	27-Oct-07/3:34 PM
Ha! I almost didn't like the word > chant. boo on me.
Re: _______ by Dovina	27-Oct-07/3:22 PM
I likes.