| Re: The Birth of an Incubus (Born a child of scorn) by SupremeDreamer |
8-Nov-03/5:42 AM |
Do something dwith this. A sonnet, 4 quatrains...
Go for 8 syllables per line. Good story. Bumpy rhyme.
Do what it deserves.
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| Re: an early discovery (reworking) by richa |
9-Nov-03/6:24 AM |
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For the record, I don't agree with deleting comments. And I don't agree with your wings either. This cut SOUNDS perfect to me and I followed it easily. I think the problem with the springs was you were trying/thinking about compression springs versus extension springs. The only extension springs I can think of are on screen doors and engine throttles. Both bad Ideas for a poem.
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| Re: Leg humping is back on the menu by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
9-Nov-03/6:32 AM |
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I think the moon was jewish last night. What is the difference between being a racist and having a "severe distaste" for a peoples? Thank you. My eyes are bleeding now. No vote. Well written, however I got nothing from this one. shoot me.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
9-Nov-03/6:54 AM |
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You almost had me with the sodium chloride. Legumes? Beans? Huh? What if I'm a lefty? Will the recipie not work?
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| Re: Greybie Blue by abecedarian |
9-Nov-03/7:30 AM |
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| Re: paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined |
10-Nov-03/6:23 AM |
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Call me wierd. I like it as is. It makes sense to me. It's just a request from a reader to a poet for some things. It works. But I don't like (dribble) . trickle , maybe. Dribble makes me think of infirm people.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
10-Nov-03/6:52 AM |
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If ever there was a writ that captured the pen-poking-temple activities of us young pens, this is it.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
11-Nov-03/12:24 PM |
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Nice flip!!! Gawd that's funny!
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| Re: God Save The King by Caducus |
12-Nov-03/6:00 AM |
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I don't suppose you or I or rockmage, have any Ideas as how to end the war? Well, here's mine. Jam the airlines with americans, hundreds of thousands, send them to Iraq wearing t-shirts that say: I know this war is not going to help, how can I? Or something similar. I know, stupid, radical crazy. Let's spitball.
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12-Nov-03/6:04 AM |
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I hope that's not really her I dea of love. I smell a little sage.
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| Re: Me and my 'ompanion by ShaNoN+960317485 |
12-Nov-03/7:04 AM |
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Walt Whitman fantasizing he's straight and dildoing a girl? What?????? 7 for the strange factor.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
12-Nov-03/8:19 AM |
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Great Idea posting against itself! I'm a bit of a traditionalist so I like the first better. I like the second also. It reads a bit like a riddle, therefore, 9
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| Re: Crampa by horus8 |
12-Nov-03/6:51 PM |
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If I hadn't witnessed my own mothers untimely demise due to renal failure, I'd say: Huh? Like every other time. squeak squeak squeak.
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| Re: paint me a poem (try 2) by nentwined |
13-Nov-03/5:39 AM |
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Sorry nen, this feels forced. Or maybe I'm a simpleton.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
13-Nov-03/5:45 AM |
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You can get three minutes out of this? More please.
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| Re: Count Spatula by Bachus |
13-Nov-03/1:20 PM |
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Not in my dish machine you don't!!!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
13-Nov-03/1:27 PM |
move (blind) to the end of the preceding stanza. Grass fingers? Or sun fingers?
A reach, maybe, make the narrarator the grass/nature?
or talk more about the fox club. It feels as if the welcome you got was cold. Perfect start i think.
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| Re: What the fuck is a HAIKU anyway? by titan69 |
13-Nov-03/1:49 PM |
The internet has GOBS of samples. Look around.
Do you always stutter? writes
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| Re: Movie Stars And White Trash Weddings by scitz |
13-Nov-03/1:56 PM |
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Capitalize protean? Marshmallow has to go. It's too young. Beyond those, RRRRRoll'em!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
13-Nov-03/2:07 PM |
are farcicles found in the frozen dessert aisle? are they eaten by Gary Larson?
Cows skip. Don't they?
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