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25-Oct-03/10:29 AM |
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Sorry there, god-o-rock. This tied my shoes together.
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26-Oct-03/4:13 PM |
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Thousand year chance. Under the rome heading. Try something else please. I don't agree with the repetition in this case.9
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26-Oct-03/4:15 PM |
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pencil (track). the harsh word stands out. find something softer. I hope you're comparing all the versions. Don't ovr work it.
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28-Oct-03/9:50 AM |
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Again, I like it as is. It took me two worthwhile reads. the end.
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| Re: no no no bad move by earthwaterair |
28-Oct-03/1:33 PM |
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Cursing someone to ooze. That's a new one.
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| Re: The Santa Anna's fire and red sun by Bachus |
29-Oct-03/6:44 PM |
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Good job boning the sun. sans lube, sans foreplay, sans sandals. always. no. I don't like sloppy seconds. thanks anyway.
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30-Oct-03/9:54 AM |
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Invert your closing lines. "left a stopped watch" kee-lar.
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| Re: Dale Winton's Buttocks by Ya Kid K |
30-Oct-03/10:18 AM |
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someone should beat you with a spade. I'd sell tickets.
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31-Oct-03/9:03 AM |
Pick 4 of the "what good" lines and expound on each one at a time. Stretch the exposition out to 6 lines.
Total 28 lines. You have too many questions and you've overworked your point.
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| Re: Hugh Heffner's Halloween party by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
1-Nov-03/6:50 PM |
I like-f-words. ffffffERRET!! fffffffffffAScinATE!!!
and my ffffffAVORITE,
FFFFFFREDERICK
Rigglesmeyer
FFFFFFFFFFFFFRIFFFFFFLESCHMIDT!!!!
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| Re: The dog that loved a chicken by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
5-Nov-03/5:55 AM |
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I suspect you have me exactly where you want me. Smack between the hen and the dog. Trying to guess how much of what you write is true and how much is fiction. It;s a thin gray foggy line.
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5-Nov-03/5:58 AM |
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| Re: Today I blew yet another Jew. by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
5-Nov-03/6:05 AM |
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Issues with issues. I hate it when that happens. Take care of yourself,eh?
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6-Nov-03/5:39 PM |
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I'm going to be a whiney little bitch right now and ask: Why is it you can post 4 at a time and the rest of us only three? Multiple personalities excepted.
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| Re: Pot Haikus (Ode to Stoners) by Shardik |
6-Nov-03/5:40 PM |
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I've never been stoned. Sad, isn't it.
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| Re: It was... by Shardik |
6-Nov-03/5:42 PM |
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6-Nov-03/6:47 PM |
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Where all minivans belong.
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6-Nov-03/7:25 PM |
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Beautiful. I think maybe a bit long winded. just a bit.
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6-Nov-03/7:30 PM |
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You've hit all the big stuff. gotta be somthing small. a broken wire, best guess. I never finished auto school. duh on me.
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| Re: A Succubus Wedding Ceremony by SupremeDreamer |
8-Nov-03/5:38 AM |
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This sounds like a flip on something that goes on in another culture.
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