| Re: The Ren (The magic in naming) by Bachus |
16-Oct-03/4:47 PM |
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17-Oct-03/8:15 AM |
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8. I would like to see this dance. work it, rockman. make it rock.
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| Re: Country music & handguns by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
17-Oct-03/8:17 AM |
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| Re: Night On the Town by razorgrin |
17-Oct-03/8:19 AM |
You've outdone yourself with this grouped trio R.G.
Kicks ass.
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| Re: laporoscopic library by FreeFormFixation |
17-Oct-03/8:22 AM |
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17-Oct-03/8:31 AM |
I wouldn't feel right if I didn't give my opinion here.
Please take no offense.
s-1 gentle embrace- find something better
s-2 lose the (but)
I don't like "Moon river" If kthat was what was playing, keep it.
one too many commas in the closing I think.
Still ,an 8.
Take what you like and dump the rest. Or dump it all.
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17-Oct-03/4:22 PM |
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shhhh. they'll market that too.
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19-Oct-03/10:17 AM |
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Wonderful special as it may be, I think I'd rather have an order of pus filled ear blisters for an appetizer. Then cancerous hip lesions with a side of kneecaps, The intestine salad,no spleen please, a glass of Brut with a meniscal fluid chaser, and for dessert, a powdered donut. Up my nose. A bit of ground limestone on the salad please. Thank you.
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| Re: Autumn by Mona Lisa |
20-Oct-03/6:47 AM |
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I just learned that leaves are actually the alter color and that the spring "stresses" them into the green. Great haiku. whose counting syllables anyway.
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20-Oct-03/11:13 AM |
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| Re: Twinkle Twinkle Little Star by Yatasuma |
20-Oct-03/11:15 AM |
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L-4 with much stronger ties. small bump.
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| Re: Metaphysical Poets by Bachus |
20-Oct-03/11:20 AM |
two questions:
Why only one (C)?
How does one turn themselves over to their ruling planet, anyway.
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| Re: glimpse by nentwined |
20-Oct-03/7:41 PM |
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jsp?id=....oh damn, I deleted it. Curse my Sagittarian self!!!!!!
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21-Oct-03/11:38 AM |
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The tooth may be gone. The ache of wisdom never parts.
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| Re: Autumn At All Saints Church by Caducus |
23-Oct-03/6:32 AM |
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Cram-o-rama. Pain, Beauty, religion,halloweenish creepiness, love. Damn good details too.
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23-Oct-03/6:38 AM |
I don't know where you stand (regarding yourself) as far as rythm and meter are concerned. I'm still figuring it out myself. That being said, I'd like to see the first 5 stanzas smoothed like tha last three.
This grooves.
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| Re: falling in with the wrong crowd. by richa |
23-Oct-03/6:42 AM |
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a diamond may cut his windscreen with light. I get the image but is it a diamond or light? I stumble here for some reason. I like it otherwise. Most what you write reaches me, makes me think. Keep it up.
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| Re: I have no problem with short people of color or religion by horus8 |
25-Oct-03/9:45 AM |
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Volumetric efficiency. Now, why is it not part of a book? Grappling with not becoming what you despise most I assume. Grapple on.
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| Re: My deepest thoughts by poetandknowit |
25-Oct-03/10:18 AM |
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Ever had a stricture? Annoying they are. The cure is quite embarrasing. It gives you first hand experience of a menstrual cycle. minus the cramps.
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| Re: First Time In A Long Time by EAger to Offend |
25-Oct-03/10:27 AM |
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Rarely. I don't often read what you write. This was worth the side trip. I'll swing by again sometime.
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