on The Ren (The magic in naming) by Bachus
16 Oct 2003, 4:47 PM
What? No Stimpy?
on some deleted poem
17 Oct 2003, 8:15 AM
8. I would like to see this dance. work it, rockman. make it rock.
on Country music & handguns by <{Baba^Yaga}>
17 Oct 2003, 8:17 AM
no comment
on Night On the Town by razorgrin
17 Oct 2003, 8:19 AM
You've outdone yourself with this grouped trio R.G.
Kicks ass.
Kicks ass.
on laporoscopic library by FreeFormFixation
17 Oct 2003, 8:22 AM
Excellent.
on some deleted poem
17 Oct 2003, 8:31 AM
I wouldn't feel right if I didn't give my opinion here.
Please take no offense.
s-1 gentle embrace- find something better
s-2 lose the (but)
I don't like "Moon river" If kthat was what was playing, keep it.
one too many commas in the closing I think.
Still ,an 8.
Take what you like and dump the rest. Or dump it all.
Please take no offense.
s-1 gentle embrace- find something better
s-2 lose the (but)
I don't like "Moon river" If kthat was what was playing, keep it.
one too many commas in the closing I think.
Still ,an 8.
Take what you like and dump the rest. Or dump it all.
on some deleted poem
17 Oct 2003, 4:22 PM
shhhh. they'll market that too.
on some deleted poem
19 Oct 2003, 10:17 AM
Wonderful special as it may be, I think I'd rather have an order of pus filled ear blisters for an appetizer. Then cancerous hip lesions with a side of kneecaps, The intestine salad,no spleen please, a glass of Brut with a meniscal fluid chaser, and for dessert, a powdered donut. Up my nose. A bit of ground limestone on the salad please. Thank you.
on some deleted poem
20 Oct 2003, 11:13 AM
goofy loveable.
on Twinkle Twinkle Little Star by Yatasuma
20 Oct 2003, 11:15 AM
L-4 with much stronger ties. small bump.
on Metaphysical Poets by Bachus
20 Oct 2003, 11:20 AM
two questions:
Why only one (C)?
How does one turn themselves over to their ruling planet, anyway.
Why only one (C)?
How does one turn themselves over to their ruling planet, anyway.
on some deleted poem
21 Oct 2003, 11:38 AM
The tooth may be gone. The ache of wisdom never parts.
on Autumn At All Saints Church by Caducus
23 Oct 2003, 6:32 AM
Cram-o-rama. Pain, Beauty, religion,halloweenish creepiness, love. Damn good details too.
on some deleted poem
23 Oct 2003, 6:38 AM
I don't know where you stand (regarding yourself) as far as rythm and meter are concerned. I'm still figuring it out myself. That being said, I'd like to see the first 5 stanzas smoothed like tha last three.
This grooves.
This grooves.
on falling in with the wrong crowd. by richa
23 Oct 2003, 6:42 AM
a diamond may cut his windscreen with light. I get the image but is it a diamond or light? I stumble here for some reason. I like it otherwise. Most what you write reaches me, makes me think. Keep it up.
on I have no problem with short people of color or religion by horus8
25 Oct 2003, 9:45 AM
Volumetric efficiency. Now, why is it not part of a book? Grappling with not becoming what you despise most I assume. Grapple on.
on My deepest thoughts by poetandknowit
25 Oct 2003, 10:18 AM
Ever had a stricture? Annoying they are. The cure is quite embarrasing. It gives you first hand experience of a menstrual cycle. minus the cramps.
on First Time In A Long Time by EAger to Offend
25 Oct 2003, 10:27 AM
Rarely. I don't often read what you write. This was worth the side trip. I'll swing by again sometime.