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laporoscopic library (Free verse) by FreeFormFixation
blistered bookends shovel sentences into your gaping ears. you listen; lovely layers of lyrics cast a spell and quell your fears. Sweat glistens on your furrowed brow, your borrowed frown is burrowing down one sentence. and the difference is the dissonance between detail and diffidence.

Up the ladder: floating
Down the ladder: Walking Out

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6666665
Weighted score: 5.179294
Overall Rank: 4829
Posted: October 17, 2003 2:03 AM PDT; Last modified: October 17, 2003 2:03 AM PDT
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[7] irishfolksuicide @ 81.86.246.56 | 17-Oct-03/7:58 AM | Reply
cast a spell and gaping ears are a bit cliche.

Like the furrowed brow your borrowed frown is burrowing down wordplay

[10] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.208.105 | 17-Oct-03/8:22 AM | Reply
Excellent.
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 17-Oct-03/7:59 PM | Reply
Better.
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