| Re: As You Are by MacFrantic |
12-May-04/1:24 PM |
Whitman-esque, painful, honest. very good.
Unfinished.
Take your last three lines, extend the first two and use the last as the closer of the second. I'm sure you're exhausted. Catch your breath, spool up, and go.
holding vote.
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| Re: Dial Tone by cuddlytiger17 |
12-May-04/6:05 PM |
Suggestion:
Listening to the phone's monotone.
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| Re: FINGER PIE by titan69 |
13-May-04/6:42 AM |
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| Re: A Year Later (edited a bit) by Sasha |
13-May-04/6:49 PM |
Maryland? So close to the capital, too.
My condolences.
Quality vill though.
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| Re: Random by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
13-May-04/7:01 PM |
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For accuracy, 10. For myself,0
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| Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
14-May-04/5:50 AM |
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s-6 L-1 hiccup. Nicely done.
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14-May-04/5:56 AM |
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Since Sasha has a Villanelle up, I would recommend trying to reform this into one. Play with it. I like the content, but I think you could lose the (zen).
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| Re: untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband by SweetJuliet10 |
14-May-04/6:14 AM |
I'M GOING TO THROW YOU A LIFE PRESERVER!!! PUT IT ON!!!
Buy a copy of : Poetry for dummies. No, I'm not kidding. and some poetry to read. rummage through the section at the library for something you like. read. practice. Then rewrite this and do your Valiant husband the justice he deserves. Because, while heartfelt, this is not poetry. Most 'rankers will write 10 pieces, only one of which will be worth rewriting or posting. Get used to it. It's work.
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| Re: Diane Keaton's Tits by JoyLuck |
14-May-04/6:16 AM |
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Wow. I guess there really isn't enough room for I have a fat back. I thought bins were bigger. hmmm.
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| Re: Bashing through the woods by INTRANSIT |
14-May-04/10:53 AM |
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This is profiling. And profiling is wrong.
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14-May-04/7:49 PM |
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This has holes that I can't seem to get across. sorry.
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| Re: In the Land of Bob by Bobjim |
14-May-04/7:56 PM |
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Congratulations. You went for poetry, and got humor. I went for humor, and wound up glancing off an udder into the far reaches of the galaxy. Cows happen.
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14-May-04/8:02 PM |
Why you little.....
Making me scroll all the way down here just to read the comments! No you do not get on the worst list with this!!!
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| Re: good bye. by nentwined |
16-May-04/5:21 AM |
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sum none. that's not pimple speak. This is really good.
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| Re: Weened by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
16-May-04/5:23 AM |
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Freaky when something doesn't get any comments. I think it's fine. Quite good actually.
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| Re: Tripping Through A Paper Square by Shardik |
16-May-04/5:25 AM |
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more hyphens! smash the molds!!
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| Re: Oomphless by shwenatjadeflower |
16-May-04/6:31 PM |
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16-May-04/6:39 PM |
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Here I am. Lagging behind as usual.
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| Re: Solipsistic, Drunk, But Still Friends by horus8 |
5-Jun-04/11:38 AM |
You chose not to capitalize (howl). Interesting.
I think I need some Poundage myself.
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5-Jun-04/11:47 AM |
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Nice to see you again, lady.
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