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6-May-04/7:04 AM |
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If this doesn't see the top, I swear I'm gonna realease a dump truck full of Bazooka bubble gum on someones head.
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| Re: clay or mud (hertz donut version) by nentwined |
6-May-04/1:20 PM |
A. Where is the other version? Searched. Came up penniless.
B. Are you regressing to high school with the donut thing.
Good but not quite you, this time.
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7-May-04/2:25 PM |
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Light and fun. The way it should be.
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7-May-04/2:29 PM |
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And the left brain-right brain connection.
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7-May-04/2:35 PM |
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I'm sure that -green nut hell- is far worse than any hell I will ever be able to imagine!! Nice one-timer.
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7-May-04/2:51 PM |
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These are the kind of poems that make me say: You are beyond this website.
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| Re: Vodka kisses & the final sigh, v.II (bloody vodka remix) by SupremeDreamer |
8-May-04/1:13 PM |
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Better beat, verbage. Quite.
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| Re: forwards by nentwined |
8-May-04/1:23 PM |
S-3
this greatening
restricted.
S-4 stop,period, Drop the solo line.
These are my suggestions. Nice to see you in the 'hood.
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| Re: Ghosts by unknown^user |
9-May-04/11:33 AM |
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Love the piece. Hate the commas.
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| Re: Spring Cleaning by horus8 |
9-May-04/4:18 PM |
I hate to be picky but the lack of reason bugs me. Failed marriage? Death? Who would be around to watch?
Sorry.
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| Re: Obituary for the Moon by wilco |
9-May-04/4:20 PM |
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Groovy. 'Rita, please. no salt.
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| Re: Spring Cleaning by horus8 |
9-May-04/5:35 PM |
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Would you like me to be less generous and more critical more often?
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10-May-04/5:36 AM |
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Check out -Lunge fish-, one of mine. similar motif. The ranker's not giving me an i/d for it. I feel so lost.
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| Re: Fighting before bed by zodiac |
10-May-04/6:39 AM |
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It's hard for me to believe that anyone could find fault in this. Yet someone with more knowledge than I, might.
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| Re: selfhood, through extrospection by nentwined |
11-May-04/5:45 AM |
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I have no clue what this means other than the closing line. Still, I like it's originality. Particularly the beat.
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11-May-04/5:58 AM |
The folks cursing are doing the stumbling, I assume.
Sidenote: Thank you for all of your comments and help
on my poems. I'm not sure I'd thanked you in a while.
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11-May-04/1:20 PM |
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| Re: Kept by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
11-May-04/1:55 PM |
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12-May-04/12:49 PM |
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(Lucky) helps. I liked it without the second -buckets-. I understood once I had looked up pales. I thought it was fine. Still great though.
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12-May-04/1:00 PM |
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Yucaipa feel lately? Ok bad jokes aside. I almost went for El Paso Texas for some reason. I know the coloration of Uranus works but the neme comes across to rudely/humorously. Find another planet or image please. So dirty and classy at the same time, I think youcould lose the *cocks* too. Reword those lines and the flag goes up.
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