Re: Interest and Association by MacFrantic	6-Jun-07/2:39 AM
S'almost a swinging twenties style applied to an eighties era. I like how you desribe things - the adjectives and metaphores - and the twisted structure behind the words. It's the kind of poem you expect to be read by a slick voice through thick lips. Slant rhyme, and all that jazz. => Jess
Re: Sit tight, sweetheart by JMakStak	6-Jun-07/2:42 AM
people blinded by the pr and politics fronting a war? losing loved ones in choosing ignorance? I'm interested to know what this is about, because I like the poem itself, language etcetera. but I like the metaphore/simile/etc itself a whole lot more.
Re: The Corner Tavern by jessicazee	6-Jun-07/2:45 AM
Hm, I like this and I don't. I like how you desribe things, in themselves, but I don't like the repetition. Kitch language (which I like), but then again the repetition of words like and and for and how kind of drown it out. But I mean, we're talking personal tastes here. You know how it's best read, not me lol.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Jun-07/3:00 AM
The syllables seem off for a haiku, but to be honest I wouldn't have a clue what exactly constitutes any form of poetry. Seems a little ambiguous to me, although I guess there's meaning enough. What hinders you only makes you stronger, makes you look for alternate roots, stops you taking the path most taken, cliche, cliche etcetera. => Jess
Re: The North Wind by Ranger	6-Jun-07/5:15 AM
There are all this tricky rhyme schemes in the world, but I reckon it's nice to see it taken back to basics once in a while. One on one, obvious yet not obtrusive. Lyrics or not. I'd've written Said in the fifth line with a '. 'Said, short for I said. But I can be the queen of ideomaticity and colloquealist english. So I'd caution you against my advice. But yes, I'd say if we polled it here and now missed 'I love you's would be the chief regret. => Jess
Re: Stripes by JMakStak	6-Jun-07/9:13 PM
I love the rhythm and how the words just kinda weave in and out of each other. I like the edgy language, and how the rhyme isn't too obvious. It's great. Sexy in the other sense. => Jess
Re: Shuushin the multi-personality total cunt by mr cunt	6-Jun-07/11:05 PM
Haha, I could give you points for laughs. But I'm not going to. (and usually I hate poetry Nazis).
Re: The Red Chain by MacFrantic	7-Jun-07/12:57 AM
I don't understand the first line, and I'm not one for poetry that's so rephrased and rearanged it's fragmented, so this doesn't rate all that highly with me.
Re: 0 by MacFrantic	7-Jun-07/12:59 AM
Great minds think alike, eh? I like. Very, very much. So very clever, so very few words. I'm not going to check if it's bonified haiku or not (as form and strucure aren't a biggie in my books), but it's great. Oh god, oh snap, => Jess
Re: One O Five in the A.M. by Enkidu	7-Jun-07/1:13 AM
What the random? You're not drunk or spaced, because the typing's coherent... but maybe it's transcipt of the post previously poorly written. Either way, a little more spastic fantastic than poetry. => Jess
Re: Johnny Neurotic by Enkidu	7-Jun-07/1:15 AM
I like this one a little better. Twas worth the read in thought alone. So many media references... I had to think it back twice to remember some of it, lol.
Re: Humpty Dumpty's Regrettable Fate by MacFrantic	7-Jun-07/1:17 AM
Hahaha... very entertaining much. Where did you pull this prom?
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Jun-07/2:47 AM
Not as good as the last I read, how-ever still mind-twisting decent. Anything that provokes thought is worth a read.
Re: May Monday Explanation by MacFrantic	9-Jun-07/12:03 AM
I like the first four lines, but after that it's like the meter/syllables/what-ever-poetry-nuts-call-it completely changes... I mean, the meaning works, really well, but that sudden drop between moment and erode just doesn't sit right as I read it. => Jess
Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	9-Jun-07/12:15 AM
Very, very nice. This tipped off my tongue beautifully, and the language/wording is excellent. It's classy in the beautiful sense.
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Jun-07/12:18 AM
you're quite the character, huh?
Re: Jesus by Sing4Jesus!	9-Jun-07/12:19 AM
I like your poetry. Why are you listed so lowly?
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Jun-07/12:34 AM
indecent descent? I quite like it for the smile I put on my face, but I'm not quite sure if it's poetry.. ;) here's a bonus 3 for that smile.
Re: Persnickety by malpaso	9-Jun-07/12:42 AM
I think this could be expanded on, lines changes and lengthened, others added. Fatten up the story if you will - the story's clear but the details aren't. => Jess
Re: turd cutter by Count Flatula	9-Jun-07/1:52 AM
you know, the content isn't why I'm giving this a 0, because I actually find feminism provoking bits and pieces amusing. I'm giving this a 0 because you could've done something better. the meter's out and the rhyme happens once. put some time into it.