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Stripes (Free verse) by JMakStak
Burn out, don't calm down, this town will be sated. Her teeth crunch beneath every leaf-crusted grate, and her lips are the curb. Cracked cement stretched and sore. She's tasted you once, now her throat chokes for more. A roach skits along where a guardrail is bent. Her nose is his eyes and shes's picked up your scent. She'll block you with buildings, she'll lap at your tires. She'll wrap you within wound-up telephone wires. So burn out, don't calm down, leave stripes down her chin. Get out before somebody pulls you back in.

Down the ladder: DUKE BLOBBY;;;;;

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.3333335
Weighted score: 5.1589375
Overall Rank: 5154
Posted: June 6, 2007 3:15 PM PDT; Last modified: June 6, 2007 3:15 PM PDT
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[9] sca @ 210.8.228.185 | 6-Jun-07/9:13 PM | Reply
I love the rhythm and how the words just kinda weave in and out of each other. I like the edgy language, and how the rhyme isn't too obvious.

It's great. Sexy in the other sense.

=> Jess
[n/a] JMakStak @ 67.41.154.93 > sca | 28-Jun-07/10:59 PM | Reply
Thank you very much, jess. im trying to make it a song
[10] Skamper @ 202.6.130.223 | 7-Jun-07/4:13 PM | Reply
The language is brilliant.
[n/a] JMakStak @ 67.41.154.93 > Skamper | 28-Jun-07/11:02 PM | Reply
Thank you, scamper.
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