Re: C. by skaskowski	29-May-07/5:52 AM
"I watched your sideview-mirror split into a thousand glassy pieces, like the sparkly spray from sneezing in the sunlight." My fav description - and like these lines, movement and colour follows in every thing you've written.
Re: a comment on Fighting For Peace (is like) by Skamper	29-May-07/5:40 AM
sometimes you just hit it...thanx
Re: a comment on Ode to Jack by Skamper	29-May-07/5:37 AM
Well kind of an ode, only in the sense it's a dedication I guess. I know what your saying with internal rhymes giving a kick and work the flow...I will work on this, when I get over myself...a week or so should do it...
Re: a comment on Ode to Jack by Skamper	29-May-07/5:34 AM
thanks..."chained in their vanity" - hmmm...I can see it working in my head...wanna look? Can't explain it any other way, maybe except to say that most poets refuse to learn, thinking what they write is as vivid as van gogh's Irises, when in reality they dabble with fingerpaint...*shrugs*
Re: a comment on Ode to Jack by Skamper	24-May-07/11:27 PM
I thought there was some, and alliteration, and assonances. I confess to not editing this at all. I would appreciate any input given, if you can see where this needs work let me know pls. With that said I don't want to lose the 'feel' of lamenting spontaniously about the lack of true poetry.
Re: a comment on Ode to Jack by Skamper	22-May-07/3:32 PM
I've only just discovered Jack, and all he stood for. Thanx for the input...
Re: The Happy Side of Misery by Dovina	22-May-07/3:22 PM
Cows will be cows and nothing more - which seemed to irritate the cyclist, to the point of internal dialogue where the cyclist attempts to free them from a fence that obviously doesn't bother the cows, for they have all they need exaclty where they are. Did the cyclist also feel the cows disdain for one who would expand energy so uselessly - as the next hill offers nothing but the same as the last? I like this, and think it needs nothing but the use of imagination in the reader.
Re: a comment on 1945 by nypoet22	22-May-07/3:07 PM
This senryu caused quite a discussion in our house (yes, slow day). With many conclusions being formed on the use of the word -satchel. In your first write I had thought he was executing her, the language you used has softened with this re-write, and I think you had called her a survivor. The title dragged our minds to WW2, where the use of a satchel was widespread, from medics to children. He cries – her death breath Whispering - quiet, my love He holds her satchel It's hard to write with anothers thoughts, and I am still a little confused - all good tho - not everything needs an explanation, some writes are made to make you think..
Re: 1945 by nypoet22	20-May-07/6:37 PM
Is she being executed?
Re: a comment on Yeah by Skamper	20-May-07/6:33 PM
who owns god...not me - I don't even keep a dog
Re: Snow by MacFrantic	19-May-07/4:31 PM
I felt the ice
Re: My Soul Cries Out by amanda_dcosta	19-May-07/4:21 PM
There's a lot of this kind of poetry out there - standing out is a challenge. "And erase those emotions that cause me to Be disappointed in you." A clever line - a definate keeper
Re: Bookshop girls by Stephen Robins	19-May-07/4:15 PM
Bookshop boys are a tiresome lot Corduroy trousers And a spotted bot
Re: Fraser Allonby Quidnam Cruris by Stephen Robins	17-May-07/1:56 AM
LMFAO...So that's who ate all the pies! Looove this...
Re: a comment on the magic rock by nypoet22	17-May-07/1:44 AM
I don't like quoting others to justify a write. I liked this much better the first time around. The last stanza is brilliant... Also - I do love the way the quote ends...a little ambigiously (spell check), the way I read it Bush is named as the evil. *S*
Re: garden spite by skaskowski	17-May-07/1:37 AM
Somehow this makes me feel naked.
Re: behind the banister by FreeFormFixation	17-May-07/1:35 AM
Chilling. Lyrical and a little mad.
Re: Portrait of the artist as [insert adjective] by Nicholas Jones	17-May-07/1:31 AM
Charming self portrait.
Re: a comment on View From The Gutter by Skamper	17-Apr-07/3:21 PM
Tell me what hasn't been done before? Don't we just inhale, and exhale the same stuff, hoping to maybe create smoke rings or balloon animals to wow the audience? *sigh* so jaded are the onlookers...
Re: a comment on Empty by Skamper	30-Mar-07/5:16 PM
Grammar, it's always such a sticking point. I will learn no doubt, then it might become natural, like what I write is to me now! Someone might just get me anyway, that's the one I want to reach...