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Empty (Free verse) by Skamper Lipstick bleeds a trail
over rails of broken teeth
she sharpens
Painting smiles on
hardened glass
shattering past
the death reflection
draped upon a covered
skeleton
On slickened path
beauty faded fast
ghosting dreams
chase her uneven walk
she talks -
in loveâs tongues
Jaded history
leads her to
razored misery
the delicate trickle
glintz in ebony lights
scarred womb
rejects the failure
Up the ladder:
My Christmas Gift
Down the ladder:
The Roses
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Posted: March 30, 2007 3:24 PM PDT; Last modified: March 30, 2007 3:24 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.880797 Overall Rank: 10233 Comments:
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Dovina @ 208.127.114.22
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30-Mar-07/4:42 PM
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I think, like others do, that you should use better grammar - mot necessarily perfect grammar, but something closer to conformity. That way, someone besides you might get what you're saying.
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Skamper @ 202.6.129.18
> Dovina
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30-Mar-07/5:16 PM
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Grammar, it's always such a sticking point. I will learn no doubt, then it might become natural, like what I write is to me now! Someone might just get me anyway, that's the one I want to reach...
explanation will often ruin a poem, i know, but is this about an alcoholic suicide or lonesome solitude .... or something else entirely
I'm not really sure - it arrived in a picture, like a snapshot and I wrote it...I find it just sad
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