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Empty (Free verse) by Skamper

Lipstick bleeds a trail over rails of broken teeth she sharpens Painting smiles on hardened glass shattering past the death reflection draped upon a covered skeleton On slickened path beauty faded fast ghosting dreams chase her uneven walk she talks - in love’s tongues Jaded history leads her to razored misery the delicate trickle glintz in ebony lights scarred womb rejects the failure

Dovina 30-Mar-07/4:42 PM
I think, like others do, that you should use better grammar - mot necessarily perfect grammar, but something closer to conformity. That way, someone besides you might get what you're saying.




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