Re: Her by Sasha	30-Mar-07/4:23 PM
Fast life, fading fast. The third stanza stands out for me, seems I can almost grasp this and then it flows away. Sometimes that's the best bit about reading anothers poems, how the meaning is just out of reach, yet there is an understanding. Nice write.
Re: You can't send love to a voicemail. by drnick	30-Mar-07/4:13 PM
Loving the title, so direct and harsh! Last line throws me a little though, not sure why, but if I replace 'just wait' with 'hang on' I get it to flow better. Plus it ties in with being on the phone if you know what I mean?
Re: a comment on Llamas by Skamper	30-Mar-07/4:07 PM
Exactly that! many thanx...
Re: a comment on Llamas by Skamper	30-Mar-07/4:01 PM
The title has no bearing, it was a random choice as I was titling this piece someone mentioned Llamas...I was/am lazy. Slide your new tongue between the cracks ties in more with what is written after than before it. I agree with the 'the' in line two and have adjusted it on my own copy. thanks for reading.
Re: a comment on The Finding by Skamper	30-Mar-07/3:58 PM
Portentious? Meaning they are literally that, a search and a finding? Hmmm...That's exactly what the writes are about. I think this poem needs nothing, it works for me. There isn't anything lurking behind shadows, it's all there...a little scrambled but I like my ideas that way.
Re: a comment on Paper Maker by Skamper	30-Mar-07/3:52 PM
LOL...Arid Air..isn't it though!! If we all stop using cliche's how long will it be before they become 'cool' and we can use them again?
Re: a comment on Paper Maker by Skamper	30-Mar-07/3:50 PM
Thankyou, I follow what you mean now. I write how I talk, I know thats a really bad cop-out, but that is how I do things. I like your revision and maybe it will help me in the future...
Re: a comment on The Search by Skamper	30-Mar-07/3:46 PM
I get it! You don't get it! Understandable I guess...too hard to explain everything. It is what it is. Grammar and syntax have nothing to do with this, it's written with inner rhythm and left open to interpretation. Your last comment comes close to what I was trying to say, but I'm guessing that wasn't the intention. odd - odd eyes Darwin awards - too late for the stupid woman as she is pregnant it - the deafness of my cat - caused by odd coloured eyes, or the fact he's pure white three legged dance - he demanded the dance, which is to say, he called his three legged cat over to show me... Anyhooo...thanx muchly for taking the time to read and pass comments...it is appreciated (this and the finding are connected, I lost two cats in 3 days...one came back-poisoned)
Re: A twisted Trail in Eden’s Garden by Dovina	24-Mar-07/8:51 PM
Choices and hindsight, glimpses of hidden possibilities all written here. Not 100% sure of the meaning, but I appreciate what it brings to me.
Re: Guarded Fool by drnick	24-Mar-07/8:39 PM
Love this! So stringent, seems to hold form of a rhyme scheme then loses it, excellently played out, not only in words but in the way the mind tries to be bound by form, only to lose it and let it flow...make sense? I usually don't...
Re: the magic rock by nypoet22	24-Mar-07/8:35 PM
You could lost the 'but'...always seems a way of apology for what went before. Very clever write, and one to hang on the mind for a while.
Re: Hairball by jessicazee	24-Mar-07/8:31 PM
Nice images, well I say nice because it appears without force, as for the actual image..real nice!
Re: a comment on The Finding by Skamper	24-Mar-07/8:27 PM
Vague? Yes-I guess I am. The Search and The Finding are connected. I appreciate your review and honesty, which is why I decided to join. As for the guff, a word I haven't heard sinse the old country-but I have a nice pile of it handy. Many thanks.
Re: a comment on Paper Maker by Skamper	24-Mar-07/8:16 PM
Over-prepositional? Not a clue what you mean by that. Indulge me please, for I am ignorant. Thanks for reading and commenting!
Re: Untitled by Dovina	23-Mar-07/10:05 PM
Are you all related? Has anyone fled this place in tatters? Speaking of the reviews here, not the poem. which is lovely, I like haiku and even sweetness has it's place..nice!
Re: Thinking for you by J.B. Manning	23-Mar-07/9:52 PM
Just Out! Standard answer... did you forget the 'e' in slime?
Re: Whispers the Pariah by Enkidu	23-Mar-07/9:41 PM
Nice/twisted/descriptive and fast! I like the suckling as it feels like the shore is a parasite on the mountains it washes upon. Not sure about using 'from' in the line...bursts from within...Reads just as well without, humble opinion only.
Re: A Lesson by nypoet22	23-Mar-07/9:36 PM
My kinda class - energetic and noisy..
Re: The Small Ones by Dovina	23-Mar-07/9:34 PM
Middle-age takes another step toward the doddering of those past thinking, while the young, who survive become the wise - all heads now nodding. Fabulous write and imaginative story-telling.
Re: Oliver by Stephen Robins	23-Mar-07/9:12 PM
Self wrapping is easiest, less costly if you can grasp the ribbon with one hand and teeth...