Although most haiku are untitled, it does seem a strange title; maybe "Blank" or "_____" should fill that space. Have you, too, inverted the scale, giving nines to the terrible?
You were so extraoridinarily close to saying something unpleasant to someone in that comment, but then you rescued yourself by chintzing it up with some " ". However, a pleasnat comment with a barb from Ranger is still the most withering attack anyone can experience on poemranker. So Dovina, get yourself a title, and then get yourself back to the open water before the Icelanders catch you and make you into heating oil.
Sentiment, morality and metaphor are not absent from Japanese haiku. Basho, Buscon, Issa, Shiki all used them. True, the Japanese almost always used seasonal references, which English writers, sadly, have thought unnecessary. And we tend to use Western literary devices, which really donât work well in haiku.
Are you all related? Has anyone fled this place in tatters? Speaking of the reviews here, not the poem. which is lovely, I like haiku and even sweetness has it's place..nice!
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western haiku always has this slight touch of sentiment, morality or metaphor.
I find a touch of sentiment in this one:
even when I'm in Kyoto
when I hear the cuckoo
I long for Kyoto
still, it's more of an observation of a sentiment.
But this is one of the best:
Old pond
Frog jumps in
Splash!
(both are by Basho)
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