| Re: a comment on Week End Justification by half.italian |
19-Sep-06/9:33 AM |
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If you see it and it works, Its there. My subconcious tends to do some amazing things when I'm not thinking. :)
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| Re: a comment on Week End Justification by half.italian |
18-Sep-06/10:04 AM |
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Thanks ecargo. You provide the exact nudge I need. I'll work on it and see where it goes.
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| Re: a comment on Week End Justification by half.italian |
17-Sep-06/6:21 PM |
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I like that connection. It adds another dimension that I hadn't expected. I meant Kong less literally, as in a powerful beast.
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| Re: weather poem part 7: a short, sudden gust by nypoet22 |
17-Sep-06/12:15 PM |
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I think you mean "whether" in the last line.
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| Re: a comment on Week End Justification by half.italian |
17-Sep-06/12:06 PM |
hmmmm... Show me how the skyscraper and airplanes fit.
I worked on the "hollow ears" line for several hours and couldn't get it right. I tend to hide lack of skill behind vague, incomplete images. Does it make any sense?
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| Re: The Red Chain by MacFrantic |
16-Sep-06/2:24 PM |
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Did I miss something in the first line? A missing word or I just don't understand enough to accept it. Second stanza; elegant, chilling.
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| Re: Satyr by ecargo |
15-Sep-06/10:48 PM |
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| Re: Farewell, Kind Lover by Dovina |
15-Sep-06/10:42 PM |
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| Re: Morning Glory by moyah8 |
15-Sep-06/10:35 PM |
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| Re: Prayer by amanda_dcosta |
15-Sep-06/10:29 PM |
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I dont particularly like God poems. But this one is good. It reads better if you get rid of "would I call on him" and "quenching" and "torrents of love and grace" IMHO
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| Re: Flour by MacFrantic |
10-Sep-06/5:08 PM |
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I love it. But at the same time the punctuation pisses me off. I don't think it adds anything more than a few characters in length.
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| Re: a comment on The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian |
10-Sep-06/5:03 PM |
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Yours are not plain at all. They have beautiful imagery.
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| Re: a comment on The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian |
10-Sep-06/4:36 PM |
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Point taken. I'll try a few with a bit less abstraction.
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| Re: a comment on Once they were gliders. by half.italian |
10-Sep-06/10:43 AM |
Its just about cars getting old and decrepit. The lucky ones will get repaired.
Take what you want from it.
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| Re: End of day poem by ecargo |
9-Sep-06/2:59 PM |
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The stanzas confused me a bit, but the words are beautiful. Wow.
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| Re: Products of Pacifisim by Nuit |
9-Sep-06/2:46 PM |
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Second lunatic here... Too in your face. A bit of mystery might help.
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