replying on Week End Justification by half.italian
19 Sep 2006, 9:33 AM
If you see it and it works, Its there. My subconcious tends to do some amazing things when I'm not thinking. :)
replying on Week End Justification by half.italian
18 Sep 2006, 10:04 AM
Thanks ecargo. You provide the exact nudge I need. I'll work on it and see where it goes.
replying on Week End Justification by half.italian
17 Sep 2006, 6:21 PM
I like that connection. It adds another dimension that I hadn't expected. I meant Kong less literally, as in a powerful beast.
on weather poem part 7: a short, sudden gust by nypoet22
17 Sep 2006, 12:15 PM
I think you mean "whether" in the last line.
replying on Week End Justification by half.italian
17 Sep 2006, 12:06 PM
hmmmm... Show me how the skyscraper and airplanes fit.
I worked on the "hollow ears" line for several hours and couldn't get it right. I tend to hide lack of skill behind vague, incomplete images. Does it make any sense?
I worked on the "hollow ears" line for several hours and couldn't get it right. I tend to hide lack of skill behind vague, incomplete images. Does it make any sense?
on The Red Chain by MacFrantic
16 Sep 2006, 2:24 PM
Did I miss something in the first line? A missing word or I just don't understand enough to accept it. Second stanza; elegant, chilling.
on Farewell, Kind Lover by Dovina
15 Sep 2006, 10:42 PM
Wow!
on Morning Glory by moyah8
15 Sep 2006, 10:35 PM
Meaningless dribble.
on Prayer by amanda_dcosta
15 Sep 2006, 10:29 PM
I dont particularly like God poems. But this one is good. It reads better if you get rid of "would I call on him" and "quenching" and "torrents of love and grace" IMHO
on Flour by MacFrantic
10 Sep 2006, 5:08 PM
I love it. But at the same time the punctuation pisses me off. I don't think it adds anything more than a few characters in length.
replying on The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian
10 Sep 2006, 5:03 PM
Yours are not plain at all. They have beautiful imagery.
replying on The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian
10 Sep 2006, 4:36 PM
Point taken. I'll try a few with a bit less abstraction.
replying on Once they were gliders. by half.italian
10 Sep 2006, 10:43 AM
Its just about cars getting old and decrepit. The lucky ones will get repaired.
Take what you want from it.
Take what you want from it.
on End of day poem by ecargo
9 Sep 2006, 2:59 PM
The stanzas confused me a bit, but the words are beautiful. Wow.
on Products of Pacifisim by Nuit
9 Sep 2006, 2:46 PM
Second lunatic here... Too in your face. A bit of mystery might help.