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weather poem part 7: a short, sudden gust (Senryu) by nypoet22
everyone mentions the weather, and now i must weather your mention

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Posted: September 16, 2006 7:52 AM PDT; Last modified: September 16, 2006 7:52 AM PDT
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[7] Dovina @ 12.72.42.214 | 16-Sep-06/11:28 AM | Reply
Don't you mean, haiku? funny
[n/a] nypoet22 @ 65.9.114.211 > Dovina | 16-Sep-06/1:39 PM | Reply
"A senryu is a three line Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku. It is unrhymed and the subject is based on human nature. It is usually satirical or ironic."
[7] half.italian @ 70.36.242.152 | 17-Sep-06/12:15 PM | Reply
I think you mean "whether" in the last line.
[n/a] nypoet22 @ 65.9.114.211 > half.italian | 17-Sep-06/4:24 PM | Reply
no, i mean weather. as a verb it means to survive or get through something, to cope with it in spite of the harm it does, like "weathering the storm."
[9] Ranger @ 86.131.60.89 | 18-Sep-06/6:53 AM | Reply
'Weather' works fine as a verb in the last line; I read it that way the first time round. You might want to think about making the title a little more revealing - perhaps twisting round the Oscar Wilde quote 'The only thing worse than being talked about is not being talked about' (assuming I remembered the quote correctly). Of course, you run the risk of having a title longer than the poem that way.
[8] ecargo @ 167.219.88.140 | 18-Sep-06/8:58 AM | Reply
Appropriate title, that's for sure. Clever in its way--especially the roundabout ending (everyone mentions the weather and now I must weather your mention [of the weather].
[n/a] nypoet22 @ 65.9.114.211 > ecargo | 18-Sep-06/1:40 PM | Reply
neat, i hadn't even thought of that! i actually meant now i must weather your [being mentioned by someone else]. i love it when people discover abiguities i hadn't considered.
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