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weather poem part 7: a short, sudden gust (Senryu) by nypoet22 everyone mentions
the weather, and now i must
weather your mention
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Posted: September 16, 2006 7:52 AM PDT; Last modified: September 16, 2006 7:52 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.1430435 Overall Rank: 5443 Comments:
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Dovina @ 12.72.42.214
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16-Sep-06/11:28 AM
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Don't you mean, haiku? funny
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nypoet22 @ 65.9.114.211
> Dovina
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16-Sep-06/1:39 PM
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"A senryu is a three line Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku. It is unrhymed and the subject is based on human nature. It is usually satirical or ironic."
I think you mean "whether" in the last line.
no, i mean weather. as a verb it means to survive or get through something, to cope with it in spite of the harm it does, like "weathering the storm."
'Weather' works fine as a verb in the last line; I read it that way the first time round. You might want to think about making the title a little more revealing - perhaps twisting round the Oscar Wilde quote 'The only thing worse than being talked about is not being talked about' (assuming I remembered the quote correctly). Of course, you run the risk of having a title longer than the poem that way.
Appropriate title, that's for sure. Clever in its way--especially the roundabout ending (everyone mentions the weather and now I must weather your mention [of the weather].
neat, i hadn't even thought of that! i actually meant now i must weather your [being mentioned by someone else]. i love it when people discover abiguities i hadn't considered.
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