| Re: Mummy by Cali |
1-Jun-03/7:39 AM |
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Dead people don't become angels. Even the most basic grasp of theology would tell you that. This is also at least the second poeme in which you have rhymed "love" with "above" in some insipid reference to heaven.
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| Re: Dream by Cali |
1-Jun-03/7:40 AM |
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| Re: You Left Me by Cali |
1-Jun-03/7:41 AM |
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| Re: You Left Me by Cali |
1-Jun-03/7:44 AM |
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I'll tell you what really fucking annoys me about pieces of crap like this. The whole reason poemes with simple rhyming schemes that crudely express an obvious and uninteresting emotion are seen as deep and meaningful and beautiful is because people associate them with children, because it's the kind of poeme children write, and when children do something sad inexpertly it's beautiful and meaningful etc.. But you aren't a child, so when you do it it isn't beautiful or meaningful, it's just stupid. Stop doing it.
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| Re: How I want to be by Felzpoet |
1-Jun-03/7:28 PM |
Many of your poemes seem to be based on a rather curious assumption: that you have some property P that is neither an occurrent property nor a disposition; nor is it supervenient on any delineable set of your other properties. It is unclear what such a property could be.
It's a common enough mistake to make, Felzpoet. You have misinterpreted your desperate longing as some kind of indescribable compatibility or even destiny. The sooner you work out that there is no such thing as being meant for someone, and the sooner you work out that there is nothing inherent about you that makes you compatible with people you desperately long for, the sooner a) you will feel better b) you will concentrate on an activity more worthwhile c) the members of poemeranker will stop having to read your terrible poetry. I hope you realise it is for your own good as much as the good of everyone around you.
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| Re: ILLusion in Falsity by Sugar Victim |
2-Jun-03/2:56 AM |
You claim it's an endless pattern that she goes from guy to guy. But so far she's only been with a finite number of guys. There are infinitely many incompatible infinite patterns compatible with that finite past.
For example, you think her history of sleeping with worthless guys again and again indicates a pattern called 'bedhopping'. However, it equally well indicates a pattern called 'quedhopping', defined as: sleeping with worthless guys up to and including 2nd June 2003, and physically transmuting into a sentient lichen thereafter. Hence, nothing about her past history determines that she's bedhopping rather than quedhopping.
I think you have more important things to worry about concerning your friend. You'd better go and check she's not already started the transmutation.
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| Re: Four Chapters from the Detective Plum files by horus8 |
2-Jun-03/3:17 AM |
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This is some kind of bizarre conglomeration of what you've inferred from the extracts of the Grandfather story and Ironside.
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| Re: All Fours by Christina |
2-Jun-03/3:31 AM |
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Is this a poeme about doggy position sex? God'swife would love this.
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| Re: Dreary Mindsets by Christina |
2-Jun-03/3:38 AM |
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Great poeme! You eloquently express the mind-numbing boredom of a David "the new Houdini" Blaine show. How ironic that while he's absorbed in his self-important stunts, his audience also just wants to escape: to any place that doesn't include David Blaine.
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2-Jun-03/3:45 AM |
"How can a paradox be our sole analogy?"
A paradox is, of course, a set of seemingly self-evident or widely-accepted statements which are shown to entail a logical contradiction. Or perhaps by 'paradox' you just meant anything self-contrasting, hence mysterious, ineffable, beautiful yet painful?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
2-Jun-03/5:32 AM |
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Robert, you are a prime little bollock.
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| Re: Mississipi Murder by scitz |
2-Jun-03/8:59 AM |
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2-Jun-03/3:53 PM |
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2-Jun-03/4:20 PM |
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Could I ask you a rather personal question, Vipersna? It's a little embarrassing, really, but it is related to this piece. My question is this: Do women have to wear nappies to stop the blood from coming out of their bum?
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| Re: you will feel by nentwined |
2-Jun-03/4:34 PM |
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Razor scars, how powerful and sublime.
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| Re: Iterated Fuck by nentwined |
2-Jun-03/4:40 PM |
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Whatever erotic energy you might have built up in the second verse is utterly destroyed by the fact that the last word is "CUM".
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Jun-03/4:08 AM |
I have strong evidence that this is plagiarised from a suggestion by Vampiros Lesbos (who, despite his/her use of the superfluous 'e' at the end of 'poem', isn't me).
http://www.poemranker.com/suggestion-browse.jsp?id=51291
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Jun-03/4:48 AM |
There are so many great bits in this, I can't pick my favourite. horus8 = -=Dark_Angel=- = darkshark for example.
I can vaguely understand her believing horus8 = -=Dark_Angel=-, for, though we have clearly different writing styles, we have both been very mean to Journey and her precious daughter, and it's inconceivable that two different people could do that.
But darkshark? Who the hell is darkshark? darkshark has submitted three poemes and made no comments. Her evidence consists in:
a) "darkshark" contains the word "dark"
b) horus8 and -=Dark_Angel=- have each made one comment on one of darkshark's poemes
Well, I'm convinced.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Jun-03/4:59 AM |
"You are also Kaolin fire"
This goes all the way to the top! I think you are discovering the secret of the universe itself!
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3-Jun-03/9:01 AM |
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