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Four Chapters from the Detective Plum files (Other) by horus8
(Working chapter 1)
---Black bile oozed between Grandfather's lips, and
dripped onto the attendant's bloated abdomen. The
drip became a trickle, which became a steady stream,
and soon he was vomiting a thick torrent of the
shining liquid.
---Where it touched the attendant, it boiled and
frothed and formed a sickly lather, and as it
bubbled it ate away at the flesh. The skin on the
man's stomach was becoming liquid and starting to
slide around. Beads of blood sprang up where the
upper layer had been completely dissolved.
---Grandfather's head lolled forward, and underneath his
bushy, flaking eyebrows, his blind eyes rolled
insanely. With a sudden fluid movement of his arm,
he unhooked the straight razor from its holster and
flipped out the dull blade. It was just as he
remembered.
---His obscenely gnarled hands trembled, and his
breath was rapid. Grandfather hunched over the
attendant, reaching out and stroking the places that
had been prepared by the mucus. His jaw still hung
slightly open as he bent down for a closer view...
---And Grandfather began to shave.
(Working chapter 2)
---Plum opened the miniature door and stepped inside. He was in
what seemed to be a reception room; against one wall there was
a booth occupied by an obese young man, and ahead of him a wide
corridor quickly turned a corner. The room was small and lamp-
lit; the dim light and yellowed wallpaper, thought Plum, made
it somehow seem underground.
---There were vast piles of coats in every conceivable place.
Space had been cleared in the middle of the room, but Plum had
to step over heaps of dark cloth before he even had enough room
to shut the door. The highest of the coat-towers loomed,
threatening to topple over. In his mind Plum knocked into one
and it came tumbling down, pressing on him and making him
breathe musty air.
---The man, whom Plum thought of as the attendant, was intently
staring at something underneath the counter of the booth and
fidgeting. Perhaps he was playing with a puzzle; at any rate
he did not acknowledge Plum, and he seemed to be holding his
breath.
---âPardon me,â said Plum. âMay I leave my coat here?â
---The attendant frowned, still concentrating on the activity.
After a moment he let out a long rushing sigh, then finally
looked up at Plum, somewhat accusingly.
---âOne pays inside. This is the cloakroom.â
---âYes, I thought it was,â explained Plum. âI wondered whether
I might leave my coat here?â He gestured vaguely at the piles
as if to justify his question.
---The attendant glanced underneath the counter again, then back
at Plum. He seemed to make a calculation. âI'm afraid this room
is full. You'll have to put it in the back.â He jerked his
thumb toward a doorway Plum had not noticed; it was in the
booth's shadow, framed by stacks of coats.
---âA-ha, thank you.â Plum took a step toward the doorway, then
hesitated and looked to the attendant to make sure he had
properly understood. However, the man was again absorbed in his
unknown occupation, and Plum felt that further questions would
somehow provoke him.
---He made his way around the front of the booth, stepping over a
discarded fur. There was a thick wall of coats just inside the
doorway, long enough so that no light escaped underneath them,
and for all Plum knew the next room was completely dark. He
turned sideways and pushed against the mass with his shoulder;
it briefly yielded, but only to swing back and bear down on him.
He had a sudden fear that if he continued to push, it would
simply surround him and he would be unable to move.
---After a final heave, though, he was through, and he found himself
standing in a long, narrow chamber with a low ceiling, lit by an
exposed bulb. Around the perimeter, forming a rounded oblong,
was a high railing, onto which hangers were affixed; the hangers,
of course, bore coats of all sorts. The space between the rails
was not great, but Plum could move comfortably enough, and he
began to look for a free hanger onto which to hang his own
overcoat. However, the coats were very densely packed, and it was
impossible to tell which hangers, if any, were empty. He supposed
he would have to reach blindly into them, though he felt a sinking
reluctance, for no reason he could name.
(Working chapter 3)
---Grandfather slept restlessly. He had finished working for today,
or perhaps he had finished yesterday's work and there was no more
for today. It was of course possible that there would never be
more. However, he was prepared; he wore his vest, though it was
not his usual practice to retire clothed. He was glad he wore it;
the vest gave him an excited, nearly sick feeling, and he knew he
could rely on it. And without having to touch it, he knew too his
razor was in its holster, secured to the vest. At times he felt an
unbearable urge to grasp the smooth bone handle and hold it tightly,
but he did not act on it. Once it occurred to him that perhaps he
could not move his hand at all, but he dared not risk trying, in
case he turned out to be right; and since there was no outstanding
work, there seemed no good reason to do so.
---Although he had been sleeping for some time, Grandfather did not
dream. At least he did not remember ever dreaming, though he often
half recalled events, and thinking about a recollection later it
sometimes seemed to have been a dream. Now, though, he knew he was
dreaming, because in his recollections his heart did not beat, and
his hands did not twitch, and he had not seen so clearly in a very
long time. The mucus rose in his throat; it was warm and thick. He
felt an overwhelming anticipation.
---In his dream, Grandfather was surrounded by dark, heavy coats, and
there was work to be done.
(Working chapter 4)
Plum fought back an urge to tear ass out of there, and never look back,
but he had a job to do. He looked towards his goal. The end of the room
and hopefully, a way out. Row upon row of coats, one at waist level, the
other at eye level. He could just make out the ruddy glow of a
flickering light, and what sounded to him, like a one winged moth
attempting to commit suicide up around the corner and off to the left
where the coats ended. He pushed on, suddenly, something sharp and
hooked snags his shoulder forcing him around with a startle. A wire
hanger that had fallen into the envelope like pocket of a ladys rain
slicker had done its dirty work inside his left bicep, making a
suprisingly deep and filthy puncture wound. "I fucking despise wire
hangers" he said, matter of factly towards the idiot behind him working
the entry counter, now clearly out of view, and probably ear shot by
this point. "And fur for that matter, you fat bastard".
By a stroke of sheer luck, right next to the rain slicker there is
coincidentaly a vacant spot for his coat. Hanging his coat his arm
begins to throb as only a puncture wound can ache. He could also clearly
feel the warm trickle of blood running down is arm towards his moist and
musky armpit in time with the rapid beating of his heart which was now
ringing out as loud as a bass drum in his temples. He despised the night
shift, and since the death of his partner Luke Handy, almost a year ago,
to the day, he has been working the late shifts and wacko cases that no
one else in their right mind in the department would take, like this one.
I mean, who ever heard of a crazy old blind man in a suped up wheelchair
killing folks randomly and with no preference, other than a good clean
shave? Working a Metropolitan area with no set pattern over the last
twenty years? No one, but Plum and a few others, that's why he was
assigned this job, he was glossaphobic and had an intolerable stutter
when dealing with the press, and this case was one more killing away
from being a media circus. He's no fool, he knew that he was the mayor's
secret weapon for a quick re-election, or maybe just an expendible
scapecoat.
But there was something else troubling Plum, what did this old man do
before he was in a wheelchair? Maybe he hadn't always been in that chair,
he was probably somebody's son, father, grandfather, husband. Plum
snickers at this notion, then, noticing a twinkle of light coming from a
small pin on the slicker's collar, he takes it down and investigates. A
shriner's fund donation gold-member-clip-broach, clearly only gold
plated, but still not the kind of gift that a charity gives away
flagrantly to their various philanthropists and donaters for being penny
pinching Jews either. There is something else too, the pin is older than
him by thirty years, making it well over a clean half a century old, but
that's not the only odditty, for the first time Plum has also begun to
notice that all of the coats in the room are, strangely enough, from all
sorts of different time eras. Some are from the twenties, the sixties,
the eighties others more recent styles, some even older, some
aristocratic and glamorous, while others are cheap and lower middle
class. This freak observation is coupled by his noticing of a very queer
odor in the coat room that is practically borderline nauseating. The
putrid smell is both quite pungent and overbearing. A cross between
Elizabeth taylor's white diamonds perfume,
mothballs, body odor, and men's old spice.
There is another more powerfully disturbing smell mixed into the other
more mundane smells. Almost, most certainly, unnoticable to the
untrained, but definitely there to the nose of the wise.
The smell of fresh urine and working bile.
Intermission.
By -=Dark_Angel=- and horus8.
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Posted: June 2, 2003 12:16 AM PDT; Last modified: June 2, 2003 1:55 AM PDT
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