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You Left Me (Free verse) by Cali
I pray to you with all my might, To help me through these lonley nights, All i want is someone to love, Someone to hold, Someone to hug, Someone to teach me right from wrong, Someone to cry on when my faith is gone, Someone to kiss me day after day, Someone who wont ever push me away, Someone with wisdom that they can share, Someone i know will always be there, I know who i want this someone to be, But this special someone was taken from me, Taken by a blade which slit her veins, And now my life wont be the same, How could she leave me a motherless child, My life will never be tender and mild, It will be filled with lonsome nights and empty days, Because she forced that blade to take her away.

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Weighted score: 4.4039855
Overall Rank: 12973
Posted: April 10, 2003 11:06 PM PDT; Last modified: April 14, 2003 7:22 PM PDT
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Comments:
[5] Lord Ganus @ 68.14.26.239 | 10-Apr-03/11:07 PM | Reply
Lower your standards and settle for what you can get.
[5] Lord Ganus @ 68.14.26.239 | 10-Apr-03/11:14 PM | Reply
I don't want to start any blasphemous rumours but it seems that god's got a wholesome and observant sense of humour.
[n/a] Cali @ 211.28.96.70 > Lord Ganus | 11-Apr-03/12:00 AM | Reply
what? lol i dunnow ot ur talking about but yep okay.
[n/a] Mr Pig @ 62.105.88.10 | 11-Apr-03/8:21 AM | Reply
How does one pray with all there might? I am interested because surely one would injure ones self.

[n/a] Cali @ 211.28.15.21 > Mr Pig | 13-Apr-03/11:19 PM | Reply
ummm if plagiarised means copied im a bit in a pisst off mood coz like i wrote dat....I want it back up a.s.a.p and send da person who has made the complaint to me
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.113.154 | 15-Apr-03/3:04 AM | Reply
good, i would done the same.
[0] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 | 1-Jun-03/7:41 AM | Reply
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[0] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 | 1-Jun-03/7:44 AM | Reply
I'll tell you what really fucking annoys me about pieces of crap like this. The whole reason poemes with simple rhyming schemes that crudely express an obvious and uninteresting emotion are seen as deep and meaningful and beautiful is because people associate them with children, because it's the kind of poeme children write, and when children do something sad inexpertly it's beautiful and meaningful etc.. But you aren't a child, so when you do it it isn't beautiful or meaningful, it's just stupid. Stop doing it.
[n/a] Cali @ 211.28.96.70 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 3-Jun-03/5:51 AM | Reply
lmao....shutup man ur a wank! i read ur poems and they r not meaningfull at all so shut ur mouth....how do u know i didn't write that as a child? even still in the eyes of some i still am a child...you have no idea about my life whether my mother has passed on or not so fuk up! its people like u who annoy ME thinking you know everything you know shit all! so keep ur nasty opinions to urself.
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