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You Left Me (Free verse) by Cali

I pray to you with all my might, To help me through these lonley nights, All i want is someone to love, Someone to hold, Someone to hug, Someone to teach me right from wrong, Someone to cry on when my faith is gone, Someone to kiss me day after day, Someone who wont ever push me away, Someone with wisdom that they can share, Someone i know will always be there, I know who i want this someone to be, But this special someone was taken from me, Taken by a blade which slit her veins, And now my life wont be the same, How could she leave me a motherless child, My life will never be tender and mild, It will be filled with lonsome nights and empty days, Because she forced that blade to take her away.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 1-Jun-03/7:44 AM
I'll tell you what really fucking annoys me about pieces of crap like this. The whole reason poemes with simple rhyming schemes that crudely express an obvious and uninteresting emotion are seen as deep and meaningful and beautiful is because people associate them with children, because it's the kind of poeme children write, and when children do something sad inexpertly it's beautiful and meaningful etc.. But you aren't a child, so when you do it it isn't beautiful or meaningful, it's just stupid. Stop doing it.




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