Re: The Light by the_unknown_angel83	25-Sep-03/3:38 PM
[_] AABB rhyming scheme [_] About drugs [_] About romantic love [_] About writing [_] About suicide or self-mutilation [_] About the author's social pastimes [X] Arbitrary indentation [X] Arbitrary line breaks [_] Autobiographical but written in the third person [X] Clerical errors [_] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, tears falling like rain) [_] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart) [_] Clichéd angst words (putrid, wretched) [X] Devoid of rhyme [X] Devoid of other linguistic embellishments (alliteration, onomatopoeia) [X] Devoid of other literary devices (simile, synaesthesia) [X] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery [X] Ellipses used overabundantly [_] Insipidly whimsical or zany [_] Internet shorthand or emoticons [_] Leaving rant [_] Lower case only [_] 'Lyrics' [_] Melodramatic [X] Naively religious or superstitious [_] Obsessed with femininity [X] Pointedly unanswered questions [_] Rage against the machine [X] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea [_] Sanctimonious [X] Self-obsessed [_] Sentimental [_] Smugly-named protagonist [_] Thesaurophilia [_] Untitled [_] Vicarious wish fulfilment -12-
Re: ME AGAIN by oldschool	25-Sep-03/3:43 PM
Looking at a shrunken gland surpasses reading this.
Re: The fetus farm by horus8	25-Sep-03/7:02 PM
I once lived on a foetus farm, you know. Ghastly work, especially in monsoon season. The fields were often utterly awash with unformed hearts and amniotic sacs. Of course we made do with what we had, and in fact it was my uncle who invented cheese & amnion flavoured crisps and sold the formula to Walkers (who renamed it at once). This poeme is rubbish though.
Re: Lonely by the_unknown_angel83	25-Sep-03/8:18 PM
Yes, I think it is your looks. But you're a lovely lass otherwise.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Sep-03/2:55 AM
"The rage of a Gentleman stained is like no other- it renders the victim painfully buttockless, partially dishevelled, and wholly incapable of operating heavy machinery." - Charles Dickens Rutherford pulled up his breeches in disgust. Struggling to fasten his belt buckle beneath an handsomely bloated abdomen, the vast Gentleman spluttered out the latter portions of his third luncheon and staggered blindly backwards. His blundering footsteps stampeded throughout the boudoir, crushing furniture and mindlessly pulping household pets. The flailing bootlingtons hop scotched for hours, then, in some dastardly twist of fate, wedged themselves disgustingly in the soiled abyss of the butler's primary chamber pot. Rutherford fumed. Arthur Weatherby-Browne peered up from beneath his off-white sheets. And the word "unbelievably crushed pelvis" took on a whole new meaning...
Re: religion by ThePariahDog	28-Sep-03/8:43 AM
Read Soderstrom's new poem (Theology)----it's great!
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Sep-03/2:02 PM
The line breaks in this piece are more than just arbitrary - they're annoying. I really don't get poetry at all. You read this piece through, and the language doesn't flow properly because you sort of pause when you get to a line break, and then you realise that it sounds odd if you pause, so you re-read it ignoring all the line breaks this time, so then it does sort of flow, but you realise that all the line breaks did was waste time, and then you end up thinking that the line breaks are there deliberately, and you're actually meant to read it a little stilted or something like that, and then it seems poetic because it has line breaks, but then you realise that actually that's a complete load of bollocks, and all you have is some prose with annoying line breaks. At least that's what my withered, uncultured prawne of a scientific brain splat thought to itself amid chronic pancake dismounts and sporadic recallibration shut-downs. -10-
Re: Life on the Sidewalk (with superfluous vulgarisms) by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	29-Sep-03/12:58 AM
The raw emotion that forms the very core of this poem is one of the most beautiful things I have ever experienced. 10.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Sep-03/10:30 AM
--------------------------------------------------- MOTHER TERESA VI: --------------------------------------------------- An experimental rocket powered hybrid based on the original Mother Teresa II angelic warrior. Twin rocket packs provide approximately 2 squillion kidneys of thrust per square foot of pulped nappy. Special moves: the reverse rocket squat and the now infamous "FOETUS CANNON". Primary weakness: Every five minutes, Mother Teresa VI will launch itself, head-first, into the nearest brick wall. Hobbies include "scrabble" and "delivering potatoes" ---------------------------------------------------
Re: ~What do I do~ by ~Ashley Baby Girl~	1-Oct-03/9:50 AM
I'll tell you what you shouldn't do: write a poeme about it.
Re: The Western World by mrpresident	3-Oct-03/12:43 AM
Yes, why indeed? This poeme strikes a profound chord deep within me. 10.
Re: The Devil & Me by Artemis745	3-Oct-03/12:45 AM
It's good to see another Christian on poemeranker. Honestly, that bloody devil. USA! USA!
Re: Chaos by Artemis745	3-Oct-03/12:51 AM
This reminds me of the time I tried to construct a synthetic butler from a surplus beggar and a discount plus-sized wedding dress. It was tremendously exciting until I realised I had given him the powerful hind legs of a bee, and he simply leapt over the manor into the rolling green hills of Weatherby Estate. But good heavens, enough about me. This is an astoundingly stupid poeme, Sir. -10-
Re: Broken Mirror by Artemis745	3-Oct-03/12:53 AM
Perhaps you will grow a long black arm. The Arm of Nigritude they will call it. -10-
Re: When I Dream of Genie You Asshole by Shardik	3-Oct-03/3:10 AM
I don't know what the fuck this means, but it's ace.
Re: The Love of -=Dark_Angel=- and J.B.Manning by ho_hum	3-Oct-03/3:14 AM
This sure is swell.
Re: Manila by poetandknowit	3-Oct-03/1:19 PM
ace line breaks
Re: Dark Angel. Mature? or foul? by Don-Quixote	4-Oct-03/11:34 AM
What's your point? And don't say something predictable like "I don't give a shit if there's a point or not" or "There is no point because I'm on drugs". The truth of the matter is that there are reasons for all of your actions but those reasons are so mind-blowingly stupid and wrong that you'd rather pretend they don't exist.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-03/11:54 AM
In my experience, people who think they've had some sort amazing brainwave when they come up with the idea of making art out of everyday junk are wrong squared. Making art out of everyday objects is about as obvious a thing an artist can do these days without suddenly contracting into a quantum singularity of unoriginality. I've lost count of the number of times I've seen people on T.V banging on about "Oh isn't it wonderful that we've found a use for all this junk!" and "Wow it really is clever the way you've used that discarded nappy to represent poverty!" and "Doesn't this junk look great!?". No, it doesn't look great. It looks like a disgusting length of copper tubing that someone has shoved into an old mattress to make some sort of crappy otter. Not bad, though. -8-. "You ain't no MFA" hehehe. I seem to have laughed myself into some sort of hideous rant about junkyard artists. Do accept my apologies.
Re: 195.157.153.253 by <~>	5-Oct-03/5:02 AM
Whose IP is that? It belongs to at least 4 users: Edible Underpants King Abdulla I King Abdulla II Vampiros Lesbos But I don't think it is Settle because it is a London based IP address. You've probably had this conversation loads of times before, and I'm probably being a doddery old fool who couldn't even "get with the times" if "the times" had accidentally broken both its legs in a freak bludgeoning accident, but do you know who it is?