Re: Roman Toes Power the Local Crushery by DreamerSupreme	5-Oct-03/8:33 AM
What's going through your mind when you decide to put a line break in?
Re: Timmy Christ didn't like Dr. Seuss by Y2kSlamPoet	9-Oct-03/2:00 AM
Ace use of "smiley" to rhyme with "glee" and "looney" to rhyme with "sea"!!!111
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Oct-03/6:30 AM
I don't like the way "in" is shortly followed by "inside".
Re: Reptilian by Christof	10-Oct-03/6:52 AM
"brownness" is a difficult word because one doesn't know whether pronounce it "brown ness" or "browness". In fact, it was for that very reason (the consecutive occurrence of the same consonant) that the world famous magician and entertainer Paul Daniels actually changed is first name from Ted to Paul. May I suggest you replace "brownness" with "brownliness"?
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Oct-03/11:33 AM
Excellent use of the phrase "How terribly sad" to make the poeme seem sad. -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Oct-03/11:49 AM
Ace use of "sun" to rhyme with "garden" and "bridge" to rhyme with "knowledge"!
Re: My Angel's Suicide by Artemis745	13-Oct-03/5:56 AM
[_] AABB rhyming scheme [_] About drugs [X] About romantic love [_] About writing [X] About suicide or self-mutilation [_] About the author's social pastimes [_] Arbitrary indentation [X] Arbitrary line breaks [_] Autobiographical but written in the third person [_] Clerical errors [X] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, tears falling like rain) [X] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart) [_] Clichéd angst words (putrid, wretched) [_] Devoid of rhyme [X] Devoid of other linguistic embellishments (alliteration, onomatopoeia) [_] Devoid of other literary devices (simile, synaesthesia) [X] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery [_] Ellipses used overabundantly [_] Insipidly whimsical or zany [_] Internet shorthand or emoticons [_] Leaving rant [_] Lower case only [_] 'Lyrics' [X] Melodramatic [_] Naively religious or superstitious [_] Obsessed with femininity [_] Pointedly unanswered questions [_] Rage against the machine [X] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea [_] Sanctimonious [_] Self-obsessed [X] Sentimental [X] Smugly-named protagonist [_] Thesaurophilia [_] Untitled [X] Vicarious wish fulfilment -12-
Re: Why? by MercedezDream	13-Oct-03/9:49 AM
MEDIOCRITY CODE: B16040F1
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Oct-03/4:47 PM
Wedged beneath my feathered bed A sordid stain begins to spread I think it's just an aging trout But is it time to sort it out? I tell myself I'll do it later But then the task gets that much greater And as it does my fetid room Takes on a browner fungal bloom I've naught to wear that isn't soiled And that thing there is brown and coiled But "accidents" are bound to reign When Toilet's blocked and has no chain So have a soul, and do take heart, And please ignore that well-timed fart, And tolerate those crude eyesores: It's just that I neglect my chores!!!!111
Re: ٠صادر فلسطينية أن الاحتلال by Wobble McFly	14-Oct-03/3:40 AM
**** POEMERANKER PLAGIARISM ALERT ****
Re: Spread Deep in Fresh Meat by abecedarian	14-Oct-03/10:01 AM
If this is your attempt at death metal lyrics, it's shit.
Re: The spinning infirmary by INTRANSIT	14-Oct-03/10:04 AM
Who indeed? A startling, troubling, moving look at homelessness in the twenty-first century.
Re: Not On Your Nelly by Wobble McFly	14-Oct-03/1:49 PM
http://www.oxfordstudent.com/2001-02-22/ox2/2 You must be the one in the black jumper and pink lipstick. I do hope the Prosopography of Anglo-Saxon England Project is going well. Cheers. Yep. Cheers. Bye. Yep. Bye. You too. Cheers.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Oct-03/4:53 AM
beak
Re: Bus Fare Home by peaceseeker	15-Oct-03/9:54 AM
"Masks of Superiority" - This title rings so true within my heart. How did you think of it??!
Re: Faggots get what they deserve! by J.B. Manning	17-Oct-03/5:17 AM
If Jesu offered you the choice of being gay and having your ass sent to HELL, or of being gay and having your whole body sent to HELL, which would you choose, bearing in mind that walking around heaven without an ass would make you look extremely foolish? (2 marks)
Re: A Fine Day To Exit by OnTheOtherHand	17-Oct-03/9:53 AM
Atrocious use of "above" to rhyme with "love", but you redeemed yourself with the ace use of "grape" to rhyme with "escape".
Re: A Gentle Proffer by ARTIE	17-Oct-03/10:23 AM
lewd
Re: Hair by ramtheman1	18-Oct-03/3:48 AM
Hair tends to help some be strong? You must be referring to Samson - the kindly Biblical character who lost his strength when he shaved his head but then prayed to Jesu so he could get it back again and crush a load of people with a building. But the next two lines are sublimely beautiful: When you walk it moves like a ping pong, It could hit others like King Kong, These are the best two lines I have ever read on poemeranker. They capture the essence of hair so succinctly. -10-
Re: My Guardian Angel by ramtheman1	18-Oct-03/3:55 AM
It is a well know literary phenomenon that infinitely many people have rhymed "love" with "above", but I've never seen anyone attempt to do it twice in one poeme. This really is such an emotional piece, with an emotion nestling not only on each line, but between each line as well. I'm not an expert on poetry, but when a piece like this is so full of joy, love, pain, emotions, tenderness, hope, fear and wonder, I cannot help but give you a -10-. Thanks.