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Hair (Limerick) by ramtheman1
Some have it short, others long, It tends to help some be strong, Wehn yu walk it moves like a ping pong, It could hit others like King Kong, Not on purpose that would be wrong. The colors come is different shades, Some real light, others as black as spades. Worn loose, in a bun, then in braids, It gets colored when it fades. It could be fine, medium, or thick, You can shake it like a stick, But don't burn it as a wick. For the style one can pick, When it doesn't obey give it a kick, If you don't feel good it makes you sick, Then if you feel fine, you can fix it quick. For they pray it will not fray, So at the end of the day, It don't look like hay, No one wants to do it over again and pay. Kathy Jensen Copyright ©2003 Kathy Jensen

Up the ladder: Hades Ain't Far Enough
Down the ladder: Lines and half lines

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.857143
Weighted score: 5.230521
Overall Rank: 4234
Posted: October 18, 2003 1:21 AM PDT; Last modified: October 18, 2003 1:21 AM PDT
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[n/a] ramtheman1 @ 66.65.187.91 | 18-Oct-03/1:22 AM | Reply
Let me know what you think of this poem.
[n/a] ramtheman1 @ 66.65.187.91 | 18-Oct-03/2:20 AM | Reply
i was have a bad ahir day.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 163.1.146.47 | 18-Oct-03/3:48 AM | Reply
Hair tends to help some be strong? You must be referring to Samson - the kindly Biblical character who lost his strength when he shaved his head but then prayed to Jesu so he could get it back again and crush a load of people with a building. But the next two lines are sublimely beautiful:

When you walk it moves like a ping pong,
It could hit others like King Kong,

These are the best two lines I have ever read on poemeranker. They capture the essence of hair so succinctly. -10-
[8] coffeeangel316 @ 68.117.185.6 | 5-Mar-04/7:52 AM | Reply
very descriptive write.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > coffeeangel316 | 5-Mar-04/10:18 AM | Reply
What is a write? Is it like an invite to a swim meet?
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