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A Fine Day To Exit

Member since 2003 · Posted 24 Jul 2003 · 6 comments

There's feeling in a headstone There's caring for a grave Apathy defeats suicide That doesn't make it brave Lonely winter's night On a hot summer's day Trapped inside his bedroom He can't get away Hardly still living He doesn't even exist There's no point in dying If you'll never be missed Sickness at the door Raping him in his bed Pushing the right buttons And fucking with his head He cut off his creators He exorcised the love He no longer contacts anyone From Earth or above It's useless talking to him He says he's okay But now it's almost August He hasn't seen sunlight since May Caged with hunting demons Slave to his lack of will Waiting for his past To move in for the kill A fine day to exit A good time to escape Why become a raisin When you can remain a grape? Trying to fight back To escape the demon's command OneFingerAnswers with destruction Salvation OnTheOtherHand

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[7] richa 24-Jul-03/11:58 AM Reply
I like 'apathy beats suicide/doesn't make it brave'

not sure I agree with ' no point in dying/if you won't be missed' though
[n/a] OnTheOtherHand › richa 24-Jul-03/12:07 PM Reply
If you're not the one in the position then it doesn't matter if you agree does it?

I'm not trying to be an asshole, just saying that if a person has cut himself off from other people and is thinking about killing himself, who's thoughts is he going to use to make the decision?
[8] horus8 24-Jul-03/1:43 PM Reply
Fear, is what they made it to be, not you. Let the boy out to play. Vitamin D, is God's juice man, it will work.
[n/a] OnTheOtherHand › horus8 24-Jul-03/1:45 PM Reply
The boy did get out. :)

He went and bought milk actually. Later he's playing catch with some other boys.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 17-Oct-03/9:53 AM Reply
Atrocious use of "above" to rhyme with "love", but you redeemed yourself with the ace use of "grape" to rhyme with "escape".
[n/a] OnTheOtherHand › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 17-Oct-03/12:43 PM Reply
Thanks. I know that rhyme is lame but I had no where to go with it.