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The Devil & Me

Member since 2003 · Posted 2 Oct 2003 · 2 comments

I watched as it crumbled Polished diamonds to dust. I watched as it turned Solid gold into rust. I watched as it closed The vacant eyes of a child. While people cried, I watched as it smiled. I watched as it turned Ice into flame. I watched as it left While I hid in shame. It came to take me In the night. But though I hid I wouldn't fight. He tried to take me; He pulled me under. It used it's might Like a God of thunder. My strength was gone. So the devil, he won. But my life had not ended, It had just begun. The devil and I; We fought once more, And ten years later, I won the war. Although right now, I'm dead you see, But the story lives on About the devil and me.

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[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 3-Oct-03/12:45 AM Reply
It's good to see another Christian on poemeranker.
Honestly, that bloody devil. USA! USA!
[6] J.B. Manning 3-Oct-03/3:27 PM Reply
I flows smoothly, but there are a couple parts that I feel were...well that they were for lack of better words, basically. Like, "a God of thunder," I dunno...seemed like something you would write when you'er young.