Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222	12-Jul-04/4:22 PM
I like the way you've crammed several poemes into one submission. It allows the reader to sort of rank your entire life in one go. -6-
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Jul-04/7:14 AM
This is the product of the combined mental might of the grisly Swift sisters, is it? Fantastic. You really have no idea how to use line breaks, do you? You just sprinkle them about like a hideous spazzed-up leprechaun, reasoning that if you put enough of them in, it will suddenly turn into a poeme. Tell me, what do you think the difference is between: "But then They look away." and "But then they look away" aside from the fact that you think the first one is "more poetic"? -6-
Re: Tears by QuirkyWonder	21-Jul-04/5:54 PM
Your complete lack of punctuation does you credit. And the lines "Your gentle hand / Is the only healing of this treasure" have stained my rosy cheeks with tears, not for sorrow, but of happiness beyond the imagination. Actually, the best part is where you talk about not having to see things with your eyes, because you have memorized them with your mind. Now I'm going to type something with my fingers, which I want you to look at with your eyes, then assimilate with your mind, then say with your mouth, and then hear with your ears: -=AIDS=-
Re: In prison I live, by donmiguel1960	21-Jul-04/6:13 PM
What? You weep with great sorrow for a crushed leaf? Good one. As useless as cracks in a stone? Are cracks in stones really that useless? Yes, yes I suppose they are. But no more useless than cracks in just about anything. Certainly not so useless that I would remark upon their uselessness in casual conversation, perhaps likening them, as you have done, to other useless objects. If you're going to say something is useless, you may as well liken it to something genuinely useless. Like your face.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Jul-04/6:35 AM
I see you have made time in your busy schedule of bumfucking a pathetic ladyboy to briefly post a link and write a short message in all caps. For a minute there I thought you'd lost it. And for the love of christ why would a transformer have tits?
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jul-04/11:23 AM
This reads like the ramblings of a drugged horse. How dare you sully us with the tawdry details of your powdered (white) exploits? I suggest you give up arbitrarily bracketing things and take up a new hobby; one that cannot only be described as "unbelievably appalling" -10-
Re: Dan by dougsoderstrom	28-Jul-04/7:14 AM
Yet another vast plethora of ellipses... as always your work bears the hallmark of "unbelievable talent" -10-
Re: The Two Temperaments of Man by dougsoderstrom	28-Jul-04/7:37 AM
I think the fact that you have devoted your life to the pursuit of guff, whilst simultaneously trying to justify your folly by claiming to have chosen the humbler, more intellectual path to Jesu, is definitely one of your most undermocked qualities. The other being your appallingly low academic rank, which, despite all your efforts to convince us otherwise, is not bolstered by your incredible age. Your friend, Doug
Re: I Dream..... by frdup717	29-Jul-04/3:09 PM
I Cream..... I cream whene'er my gland's in yours, or 'pon your d'formèd face. I cream into your Sunday drawers, which feels unb'liev'bly ace. I cream all o'er the gloves you wear e'en though they're hard t'replace. Your voids I fill with my Swiss roll 'Til cream's all 'bout the place. -10-
Re: Mors Omnia Solvit by shit	30-Jul-04/1:59 AM
Multes pisces in meam corpum nudum diffundo
Re: MY HEART REMEMBERS by massangel62	30-Jul-04/2:02 AM
He probably looked in your "poetry diary" and realised what a horrible mistake he was about to make. Copyright ©2004 Michele J Post
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Aug-04/4:37 AM
Oh watch out its captain melodic black metal and his army of evil keyboards
Re: Summer crush by sk8rs_rule_all	4-Aug-04/6:10 PM
Hey great use of "nifty" to rhyme with "eternity", and "fast" to rhyme with... "ass"!!!!111 -10-
Re: To you by freelancejoker	7-Aug-04/2:22 AM
Soggier than an overly turgid hump-loaf.
Re: Mississippi Burnin. by SupremeDreamer	12-Aug-04/9:41 AM
You turd. It's obvious you think poetry is about being raw and controversial. You put offensive words like "nigger" and "mellifluous" in your poemes to make your writing seem more dangerous. And when - shock horror! - someone thinks you're being racist, you blunder around in a massive self-righteous rant about how your work is always being misunderstood by the PC establishment. Well I've got news for you buddy: "Your subversion is a perpetual disease" Besides, the preferred nomenclature is "Negro".
Re: My Dumb Choice...YOU by sonawrote	12-Aug-04/9:55 AM
Bulgingly stupid.
Re: Waiting In The Shadows by TearsOnRoses	12-Aug-04/10:17 AM
Four metric tons of guff, and a pinch of forlorn hope. Beautiful. Simply beautiful. -10-
Re: The Grand Adjustment by horus8	12-Aug-04/4:30 PM
It was a grey morning, but all I could see anywhere was green. Some sap called Rogers was paying me twice my actual rate to track down his ex-wife, name of Blimpo Toots. Rogers said she'd accidentally grown a beard one morning, checked the mailbox at the wrong time, and then just vanished into the seedy world of backstreet tuba shows. Not as uncommon as you might think, especially not for a girl like Toots, who according to Rogers could blow a Negro through a thirty-foot chimney and still have enough breath to ask for seconds. I took her photo out of the file and scraped off some of the crust. Yeah, she was a nice-looking broad, but nothing special. I tried to imagine her with a thick black beard bulging out of her cheeks. Well, ho-ly shit. If the Puff-up in my chaps meant anything, Toots'd be halfway to Humpsville by now, riding the cackrails on a rickety asswagon named 'Uncle Sam' with no brakes and a four liter negro injection.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Aug-04/4:04 AM
This poeme made me realise that the time to turn to Christ is now. You can't count on a death-bed repentance if you want to get into Heaven; by the time you're ready to know Jesus, it could all be too late. Then where will you be? God has given us all a chance to share eternity with Him. He made us so that we could worship Him as often as possible and then get into Heaven. He didn't make us to just sit around shunning Him the whole time. Sometimes I wonder why I don't always turn to Jesus, and I think it all comes down to a stubborn refusal to accept that there is a higher power out there, and that I am weak and sinful. What do you think?
Re: Contemplation Of The Heart by kalikopeli	15-Aug-04/10:00 PM
Unbelievably appalling. I shan't comment further on the poetry, but will give you the following important Life Tip: an apostrophe usually indicates a missing letter(or letters). In the case of "wouldn't", the missing letter is the "o" of "not". That's how you know the apostrophe must be between the "n" and the "t". Not between the "d" and the "n". Demonstrate your understanding by correctly placing the apostrophe in the following words: wouldnt, couldnt, thats, theyre (4 marks)