on some deleted poem
20 Feb 2006, 5:43 PM
Strong visuals to this one. Beginning had a punch to it and the meaning flowed. The list at the end was not as necessary, maybe shorten it a tad. Otherwise, enjoyed!
on some deleted poem
20 Feb 2006, 5:54 PM
I take this poem as someone talking to another, helping them to find the self esteem from within and to take pride in who you are and not as others see you. And she can... and just as easily, she is emotional to the cruelty in this world.
on Beauty, sleeping (revised) by Ranger
20 Feb 2006, 6:15 PM
A touch of fairytale dreams and real life entanglements, this is well rounded, including the sense of humor. Enjoyed!
on Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger
20 Feb 2006, 6:24 PM
There is an internal and line ending rhyme that keeps the river flow of this going. Nice indeed. The only line that I stumbled on was this:
“With breeze they softly are stirred”
With “freeze” right at the end going into “with breeze” something didn’t catch. Over all though, enjoyed.
“With breeze they softly are stirred”
With “freeze” right at the end going into “with breeze” something didn’t catch. Over all though, enjoyed.
on Everything That You've Ever Wanted by drnick
20 Feb 2006, 8:14 PM
And if we obtain everything we wanted, ~ yes, how boring that would be... the expression, "money doesn't buy everything" derives from that, but even more so - if every wish comes true, then what is tomorrow for. I enjoyed the ponderings this poem brought to mind.
on Empty Chronicles by Scarlett
21 Feb 2006, 7:18 AM
Sadly, this is the best of my work and for there on out - it's all down hill. Lol.. In the meantime, while my muse sleeps beneath a morning glory bloom, I'll browse around.
on Tulips and Roses by Mona Lisa
21 Feb 2006, 7:27 AM
The beginning is lovely, makes me feel that this is a muse to you. An untouchable image of passion and the dream the desires to bloom in what "could have been." There is a break though, when the dream begins. This doesn't flow together as smoothly. Don't give up on this one!
on Sunday i will dream again by Caducus
21 Feb 2006, 7:35 AM
Whew.... the images that flood from this poem are impressive. The pain of a love lost has been penned before but this was unique. Thoroughly enjoyed.
on A daisy chain for Nina by Caducus
21 Feb 2006, 8:05 AM
I'm sure I'm off base on this, especially given the comments following the poem.
But it seems to me that these are children throughout the entire poem.
She made a daisy chain, ah ~ that is sweet. I remember making flowers into necklaces when I was a young girl... but enough of that - brought back a lovely memory, 'tis all.
The marriage in the swamp is something children "play" at - playing house type of thing came to mind.
The headscarf - immediately made me think of cancer. Too many young face this and other children don't understand, they fear what's different...
The ache in the end, that she passed away ~ forever cherished, just as the chain is unending. Well, that's my ramblings...
But it seems to me that these are children throughout the entire poem.
She made a daisy chain, ah ~ that is sweet. I remember making flowers into necklaces when I was a young girl... but enough of that - brought back a lovely memory, 'tis all.
The marriage in the swamp is something children "play" at - playing house type of thing came to mind.
The headscarf - immediately made me think of cancer. Too many young face this and other children don't understand, they fear what's different...
The ache in the end, that she passed away ~ forever cherished, just as the chain is unending. Well, that's my ramblings...
on some deleted poem
21 Feb 2006, 1:35 PM
When snow can drive away the coldness and leave a heart in warmth ~ that is a lovely message. Enjoyed this (and I learned today about that little red "x" too!)
on The Acorn Daisies by MacFrantic
23 Feb 2006, 2:44 PM
Written in the harsh climate of beauty. Enjoyed this very much!
on How Well I See by Blue Magpie
23 Feb 2006, 3:06 PM
For some reason, the Villanelle form scares the daylights out of me to attempt, but your poem flowed well and the repetition formed a circle around the meaning. Enjoyed and might inspire me to give the form a try!
on Edges by Blue Magpie
23 Feb 2006, 3:13 PM
I absolutely LOVE the beginning of this - the first two lines especially. You could make it tight with the examples and less attempt on the rhyme ~ this could be a beauty.
on Take heart, you are closer than you know by Bobjim
8 Mar 2006, 2:10 PM
When I read this, I was humming along, as if written for a song. Enjoyed..
on Indiscrete by ecargo
24 Mar 2006, 6:39 AM
An excellent write, tracking that unreachable, uncomfortable feeling after a one-night stand. (never had one myself, but my girlfriends have told me the emotions, much like the ones visually described here)..
on Muff by Stephen Robins
24 Mar 2006, 7:44 AM
Oh my God, this is awful... *still laughing*
on How small, this sleeping tiger by ecargo
24 Mar 2006, 8:02 AM
In this poem, I see "Monkey" - the name I gave to a kitten, found after a storm. My garden was her home and oh, she was stealth in her attack of any leaf floating by... and she could climb like a monkey, fast and furious.. and sleep with the birds in a nest (no kidding). She's an indoor cat now, but all the same hunt games in play. This is a precious poem, filled with the joy in watching the natural beauty of animals.