i like this, but i'm going to engage in some semantics here: the ocean doesn't bring life to anyone/anything. in fact, it doesn't bring. life exists because of the ocean's properties, but a fair amount of death happens because of the ocean, also.
i like the ocean. i like what you have written. i guess i just see the ocean as a formidable force of nature that can cut in both directions. this haiku shows only one edge of the blade.
i like the ocean. i like what you have written. i guess i just see the ocean as a formidable force of nature that can cut in both directions. this haiku shows only one edge of the blade.
on The King Of Loserville by mindsigns
6 Mar 2006, 9:14 AM
not sure how to vote yet (still cogitating), but aptly titled.
on Pledge by http://mulberryfairy
9 Jan 2006, 11:13 AM
i always wondered, who offers therapy to the therapist? i mean, some of the disturbing stuff that one may hear in a session, although clinically is not supposed to stick, does. and if the therapist is in a por mental health state, that would be dangerous...
interesting piece on what i presume to be your work. must be frustrating to split off from yourself like that, but a neccessity at the same time.
interesting piece on what i presume to be your work. must be frustrating to split off from yourself like that, but a neccessity at the same time.
replying on Sunlighting by ALChemy
9 Jan 2006, 10:58 AM
please take no offense here, cyan9, as i do not know you nor will i attempt to judge you. the feeling in this poem is something i have only really come to know after having become an uncle, and which has redoubled once becoming a father.
making time to spend with a child that wants to spend time with you is better than anything else you would ever put away for later. the reward is priceless and you receive it immediately. this poem completely, in my opinion, captures the essence of that wisdom.
making time to spend with a child that wants to spend time with you is better than anything else you would ever put away for later. the reward is priceless and you receive it immediately. this poem completely, in my opinion, captures the essence of that wisdom.
on What Matters by Dovina
9 Jan 2006, 10:49 AM
i think the sentiment that inspired this work outweighs the sentiment conveyed. i am guessing a budding artist's drawing for you is the subject. as someone commented on my attempt at Haiku, "sometimes 17 syllables isn't enough".
replying on What Matters by Dovina
9 Jan 2006, 10:46 AM
now THAT's funny!
replying on A New Year Prayer by amanda_dcosta
9 Jan 2006, 10:44 AM
oops. line 10: "Misfortune's been our friend;" not "out friend as I corrected. heh heh.
on A New Year Prayer by amanda_dcosta
9 Jan 2006, 10:42 AM
line 10: "Misfortune's been out friend;" (add the "'s")
line 17: add a comma after "Lord", as in line 1.
not my style poem, but a nice sentiment. i suppose the aetheists don't deserve a happy new year? it is, in my opinion, the danger of writing a prayer-type poem, i suppose.
thanks and happy new year in return.
line 17: add a comma after "Lord", as in line 1.
not my style poem, but a nice sentiment. i suppose the aetheists don't deserve a happy new year? it is, in my opinion, the danger of writing a prayer-type poem, i suppose.
thanks and happy new year in return.
replying on A New Year Prayer by amanda_dcosta
9 Jan 2006, 10:37 AM
i'm not a teener, but i hate the shift key. either ALL CAPS or all lowers sometimes. <grin> yeah i am lazy, but i never took typing.
replying on greymo(u)rn by lmp
9 Jan 2006, 10:34 AM
i have read some Hemmingway. depressed chap but a good writer, no? perhaps this is why one writes crap after reading his work; it is strong stuff but has the tendency (at least with me) to leave me drained of any real focus.
replying on greymo(u)rn by lmp
6 Jan 2006, 10:42 AM
i wasn't sure it would fit in with prose because of the line breaks, unless a prose poem allows for that. short story might work, except there really is no story here, more like an illustration: no plot, no direction, just images and feelings.
on Memoirs of a miners son by Caducus
5 Jan 2006, 9:14 AM
damn, that smarts.
very excellent.
very excellent.
on The copper man and Labrador by Caducus
5 Jan 2006, 9:09 AM
sadly, a very common scene of today's world. the obscure references (so wonderfully deciphered by ALChemy) were a bit hard to follow. the mention of king george flipped me back in time and i was lost about the meaning of neon reapers.
well done, very cerebral portrayal of events.
well done, very cerebral portrayal of events.
on Sunlighting by ALChemy
5 Jan 2006, 8:53 AM
a favorite now. thanks.
very sweet, innocent, and lovely. a touch of melancholy, but a nice reminder of what is really important.
very sweet, innocent, and lovely. a touch of melancholy, but a nice reminder of what is really important.
replying on Sunlighting by ALChemy
5 Jan 2006, 8:51 AM
and wasn't it Brando who was Don Carleone, as well?
i think leaving it as "dawn" is a wonderfully subtle play on words; i didn't even catch it when i read it the first time. maybe because she was donning whilst it was dawning. in fact, when the poem is read aloud, noone would be the wiser.
i think leaving it as "dawn" is a wonderfully subtle play on words; i didn't even catch it when i read it the first time. maybe because she was donning whilst it was dawning. in fact, when the poem is read aloud, noone would be the wiser.
replying on light [edited] by lmp
5 Jan 2006, 8:44 AM
ok, i feel just a weeee bit foolish. (i take it you mean the first "the"?). yeah, it actually makes it 6-7-5, doesn't it?
replying on You Have It Backwards by LilMsLadyPoet
4 Jan 2006, 7:20 AM
hey, there's a good candidate for the wealthy being intelligent.
(please hear the heavy sarcasm)
(please hear the heavy sarcasm)
perhaps i will go back to my old khakis and rollneck sweater. ;P