Re: To drnick by amanda_dcosta	15-Feb-06/10:41 AM
I truely am honored that you would take your time to write such a kind piece of poetry, as this is, to a heathan like myself. I hope you understand that I will not rate this piece, due to undeniable bias. I will write a poem in responce to this, perhaps not directed to you...but more in explanation of myself. However, it was "His" plan for me to get really drunk alone last night...just like every year, and so I will have to wait until I am less hung-over. Thank you, again, for this =]
Re: A young Man’s Demise by Dovina	15-Feb-06/9:24 PM
This is really good! This might be my favorite poem I've read from you, and quite possibly your best. My only warning: do not get drunk with your power; that is what liquor is for.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Feb-06/9:26 PM
This doesn't say anything to me, your last post was much better.
Re: Historical Epic by Bobjim	16-Feb-06/2:05 PM
This is awesome, is the person narrating Les Claypool or David Koechner?
Re: The Gold and silver dress by Caducus	16-Feb-06/2:09 PM
This is really good, but I'm only giving you and 8 because people on here are writing too good lately. WE NEED TO RAISE THE EXPECTATIONS HERE, PEOPLE. WE CAN'T GIVE NINES AND TENS TO EVERYBODY, THIBK OF THE INTEGRITY. THE GOD DAMN INTEGRITY.
Re: The cat who would fly by nentwined	17-Feb-06/8:31 AM
like the 3rd and last line the best, nice.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Feb-06/10:39 PM
This is good, but I think you could have done better. For instance, lines 6 and 7 could have been worded in a not-so-obvious sort of way (ie "I wanted her to understand, but let mercy be my tounge instead"). The 3rd stanza is awesome, I wouldn't change that at all. The 4th, however, seems as though you rushed through it. The 3rd line in there seems rushed and too vague of an analogy; give us an example of purple night-lights. The 5th line in the 5th stanza should say "bit" not "bite" but I think you could have found a better analogy for that as well. Everything else seems to be in place, you just need to comb out a few of the knots.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Feb-06/10:48 PM
"this salted log, white and dumb" is my favorite line here. Yes, this has awesome imagry, but I have to agree you've perhaps been a bit too vague here as I'm not quite sure what you're talking about. I would consider adding another stanza to clarify the situation, not so that its painfully obvious...but just so we know.
Re: Conflict Resolution by Dovina	20-Feb-06/8:23 AM
Hey, you actually took some of my advice! I am honored, and I really do think this is better than the first version. The second stanza is much better now!
Re: The Struggling Poet's Lament by Ranger	20-Feb-06/10:58 AM
Yes, I've read this one before, but was unable to realize what exactly you were talking about. Now that I know, this is quite a beautiful and amazing piece. You've really done a great job describing the passion behind our words, and our struggle for satisfaction. There are so many good lines in this, but I'd like to point out my favorite(as I always do): "I stumble like the pregnant flame". Very good, and sorry for not commenting on more of your works.
Re: Just Desserts (for drnick) by ALChemy	21-Feb-06/5:58 PM
There are some small errors in this one, but I like it all the same. I like the way you've worded what you're trying to get across...it's like you've taken the direct meaning and turned your head so it's just barely in your peripheral vision. It's also something I need to work on. It's strange that I agree with what you're saying and everything, but yet find it difficult to be content. Then again, it wouldn't exactly be good to be completely content either as one would have no ambition to achieve anything greater than what they have. Perhaps the best idea is to continue to persue one's dreams while never losing appreciation for what one already has. Maybe I can rewrite my old one with that theme in mind. Thanks for putting this up here for me, that was very kind of you.
Re: Nude Falling Down Staircase by zodiac	22-Feb-06/10:52 AM
To be honest, I didn't really get this until I read your responce to ALChemy. Though, to be fair, this is a very "artsy" poem and thus should be difficult to get right away. Anyways, I love it now...especially the last line. Well done.
Re: Buried in the Booth (edit) by drnick	22-Feb-06/6:23 PM
Hopefully someone will take the time to read this...I know I wouldn't.
Re: On Looking Back by Dovina	22-Feb-06/6:26 PM
So, uh... what are you doing later? ;]
Re: The Devil's Carnival by Ranger	12-Mar-06/6:15 PM
Another good one, nice title...my favorite line is one of the repeated lines, "flashing lights become a string of pearls," because its so gosh darn purdy. back to homework.
Re: After The Snow/Diamonds And Rust by Ranger	24-Mar-06/12:59 AM
Hey Ranger, its been a while. This is good, I like the fourth stanza the best. I also like the repeated line "well I'll be damned." And I can totally relate to the lines "And you haven't visited for a while/ I still think you're beautiful." I'm sorry I can't pur forth a more meaningful responce, but I am drunk. Big surprise. After this semester I'll be back in full, but right now I have no time for poemranker.com =[ Keep up the good work, man.
Re: A Fish is Always a Fish by Dovina	27-Mar-06/8:53 AM
Ain't it the truth? I like how you lured the reader in by making the first 3 statements (lines 2-4) things that we could all accept easily and then "set the hook" with what you really wanted to say. It was hard to disagree. Are you smiling?
Re: My Prayer by amanda_dcosta	28-Mar-06/12:53 AM
You should try writing about something other than this "God" fellow.
Re: Behind the storm clouds, the moon consoles the sun.(edited) by ALChemy	29-Mar-06/9:51 PM
I am confused as to what is going on here...the mother is the sky, and the father is light? Your niece is a source of her father? I like the thought here, I think you have a good idea, but I would suggest reworking the comparisons.
Re: Because You Love Me by amanda_dcosta	31-Mar-06/10:50 AM
This is pretty good, although it was obvious to me that this is about jebus/"God." I do appreciate that you didn't mention that explicitly in the poem, though. It might not be a bad idea to keep the name out from now on so your poems can be related-to by those of us who dont believe in Santa.