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A Fish is Always a Fish

by Dovina

Member since 2004 · Posted 26 Mar 2006 · 15 comments

I had a good beginning, but clear sight dimmed in bright colors, sharp hearing dulled in loud noise, keen taste became bland with rich flavor, young faith waned in knowledge, godliness abdicated to virtue, prohibitions to ingenuity, then to cunning, finally, the hypocrisy of worldly feigning. Bait swallowed. Hook set. Fisherman smiles.

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[9] ALChemy 27-Mar-06/12:44 AM Reply
"-and I shall make you fishers of men." -Some dude.
[n/a] Dovina › ALChemy 27-Mar-06/12:08 PM Reply
Interesting that my final line should conjure that allusion. The fisherman I had in mind is another sort of dude altogether.
[9] drnick 27-Mar-06/8:53 AM Reply
Ain't it the truth? I like how you lured the reader in by making the first 3 statements (lines 2-4) things that we could all accept easily and then "set the hook" with what you really wanted to say. It was hard to disagree. Are you smiling?
[n/a] Dovina › drnick 27-Mar-06/12:08 PM Reply
Since I think of myself as the fish, I could hardly be smiling.
[n/a] zodiac 27-Mar-06/3:25 PM Reply
A fish is an animal that lives in a brook.
He can't write his name or read a book.
To fool the humans is his only thought,
And even though he's slippery, he still gets caught.
So you better watch out for what you wish:
You could grow up to be a fish.
[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 27-Mar-06/3:45 PM Reply
Haven't you read the above? I already have.
[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 27-Mar-06/4:19 PM Reply
What do you mean?
[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 27-Mar-06/5:01 PM Reply
I already have grown up to be a fish, and I don't blast someone for theft, even if he copies a well-known song and posts it as his own.
[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 27-Mar-06/5:32 PM Reply
Blast away. Anyone who doesn't know it's a well-known song should be smacked.
[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 27-Mar-06/6:25 PM Reply
I disagree, and always have.
[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 27-Mar-06/6:58 PM Reply
What do you disagree with? That people who didn't know should be smacked? Did YOU not know?
[8] amanda_dcosta 29-Mar-06/10:25 PM Reply
I like the idea you portrayed about being sunk into utmost despair, into hell.... Surely there must be some way of getting out of it, of feigning your way through the fisherman's fingers once the hook is taken out. Many a fish has escaped this way.
[n/a] Dovina › amanda_dcosta 30-Mar-06/11:17 AM Reply
I see what you mean, and I know that this does not have to be the end of the story. I could write another verse about admitting defeat, giving up, and finally being rescued.
[9] Caducus 30-Mar-06/12:30 AM Reply
I dont know what you're doing but whatever it is its working and very well too.
[n/a] Dovina › Caducus 30-Mar-06/11:16 AM Reply
That’s good and bad to hear from someone whose poems I seldom understand. But, on occasion, a glimmer. Thanks.