Re: Drowsy by elderking	4-Jul-05/1:13 PM
Thanks for the feedback and for taking the time to read it. I appreciate it.elderking
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Jul-05/1:18 PM
"all wick and no candle" I love that. I like the ending too. "...you should have known he'd do both.
Re: Moving Forward In Reverse (For Ann) by wilco	4-Jul-05/1:28 PM
It makes my heart hurt and that's a good thing. very good.
Re: Due Consideration by Dovina	22-Nov-05/4:11 PM
excellent; the last stanza (is that the correct word?) is simple and clear (a 'lesson' I could stand to learn!) elderking
Re: Waiting For The Light To Change by elderking	22-Nov-05/4:15 PM
Dovina- Thanks. It's mostly a true story that happened to me a few summers ago. That guy was bizarre! Thanks for your comments and interest. elderking
Re: Mending by elderking	22-Nov-05/4:28 PM
Thanks for the comments. I've always had a little trouble knowing when the piece is "complete" or if it still needs some work. This piece I've been writing and rewriting for over 10 yrs!
Re: Waiting For The Light To Change by elderking	22-Nov-05/5:19 PM
Oops sorry; I didn't intend for that to happen. What did I do wrong?
Re: My Interesting Life by Dovina	30-Dec-05/9:44 AM
out all of yours I've read, I think this is the best. I liked.
Re: when i met sky alone by Prince of Void	30-Dec-05/9:48 AM
I was just starting to become interested; then read the last line and it was lost.
Re: we hold hands when i sleep by hendrimike	31-Dec-05/8:24 PM
reading it made me feel achy? an empty longing? something along those lines I can't put into words. I liked all but the last 3 lines.
Re: Not for Me by TLRufener	31-Dec-05/8:41 PM
you've described perfectly an "unhearing" person I knew...he never did "hear" me. enjoyed
Re: A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	24-Jan-06/9:20 PM
I liked this alot. Very good.
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Jan-06/9:23 PM
Very well written...I felt all the emptiness.
Re: In Ethel’s Honor by Dovina	19-Apr-06/5:13 AM
Ethel had an honorable and loving man in that one... I like the way I can picture him... so quietly determined...his Ethel would have her lily. Very good.
Re: The Prodigal Daughter by Dovina	21-May-06/7:24 AM
Dovina, This was an unexpected journey down memory lane. Very sweet and nostalgic. It touched me enough to give my Dad a call! Good work.
Re: In the hollow (rough) by ecargo	21-Sep-06/3:30 PM
gramma's house for summer vacation...your words took me there. I was 10 again for just a moment. Very good.
regarding some deleted poem...	21-Sep-06/9:42 PM
it couldn't have been said better.