| Re: a comment on when enough is too much by elderking |
24-Sep-06/12:02 AM |
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heard of them. my keyboard has issues when it comes to capitalization; apparently so do you.
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| Re: In the hollow (rough) by ecargo |
21-Sep-06/3:30 PM |
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gramma's house for summer vacation...your words took me there. I was 10 again for just a moment. Very good.
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| Re: a comment on don't touch me 2 by elderking |
21-Sep-06/3:17 PM |
Thank you ecargo. and you too are correct: the syntax isn't clear. I need to slow down and remember the basics I think.
Thanks again.
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| Re: a comment on don't touch me 2 by elderking |
21-Sep-06/3:11 PM |
you're right I think "deeper pockets" may have flowed better.
Thank you.
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| Re: a comment on don't touch me 2 by elderking |
21-Sep-06/3:10 PM |
pete-she had enjoyed touching him and did so in an almost unconcious manner. he on the other hand thought each touch held a hidden agenda; he told her to stop touching him so much...so she did.
one of my biggest problems writing is dropping the reader into the middle of the unknown assuming clarity when often there is none. Thanks for you thoughts, Pete
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| Re: a comment on don't touch me 2 by elderking |
21-Sep-06/2:58 PM |
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You're right about all..I'm still in too much of a hurry to finish and not fleshing the piece out. Thanks for the input, Dovina.
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| Re: The Prodigal Daughter by Dovina |
21-May-06/7:24 AM |
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Dovina, This was an unexpected journey down memory lane. Very sweet and nostalgic. It touched me enough to give my Dad a call! Good work.
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| Re: In Ethelâs Honor by Dovina |
19-Apr-06/5:13 AM |
Ethel had an honorable and loving man in that one...
I like the way I can picture him... so quietly determined...his Ethel would have her lily.
Very good.
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| Re: a comment on Unfortunate Lover by elderking |
26-Jan-06/10:47 PM |
I thank you for your suggestions and comments.
As for my younger self...no, she didn't have a clue :>)!
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| Re: a comment on Unfortunate Lover by elderking |
26-Jan-06/10:26 PM |
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I'm feeling dense...I'm sorry I don't get what you mean.
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| Re: a comment on Unfortunate Lover by elderking |
26-Jan-06/10:24 PM |
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Thank you, Dovina...I wrote this piece just before I ventured back out into the "dating" world again after a good decade's abscence. And who I percieved myself to be at 40 compared to myself at 50 seemed to be 2 entirely different animals.
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| Re: a comment on Unfortunate Lover by elderking |
26-Jan-06/10:19 PM |
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Oops...I meant sometimes I hurry a poem along instead of just letting IT finish "cooking" in it's own good time. Sorry bout that.
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| Re: a comment on Unfortunate Lover by elderking |
26-Jan-06/10:18 PM |
Thanks for the suggestions. Sometimes I hurry a poem along instead of just letting finish cooking in it's own good time.
Thanks again
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| Re: A Sheepâs Wish by Dovina |
24-Jan-06/9:20 PM |
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I liked this alot. Very good.
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| Re: a comment on ghost host by elderking |
2-Jan-06/2:41 PM |
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Thanks, Paul S, I appreciate your comments.
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| Re: a comment on ghost host by elderking |
2-Jan-06/2:38 PM |
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thanks and you're right about the title. I didn't put much thought into it.
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| Re: a comment on ghost host by elderking |
2-Jan-06/2:35 PM |
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| Re: a comment on ghost host by elderking |
2-Jan-06/2:33 PM |
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Thanks for your comments, Dovina. I admit punctuation and I aren't the best of friends.
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| Re: a comment on when i met sky alone by Prince of Void |
2-Jan-06/2:28 PM |
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actually it wasn't the first line that caught my interest it was liine 2 & 3. . .both are keepers. The last line left me feeling like "what? is that all there is?"
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| Re: Not for Me by TLRufener |
31-Dec-05/8:41 PM |
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you've described perfectly an "unhearing" person I knew...he never did "hear" me. enjoyed
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